
Lurk_R
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Help me make your daddy a liar
LMAO! Too many hidden meanings behind that one.Lurk_R said:Help me make your daddy a liar
Rokket said:You fill my desire or
You're the one I desire or
whatever....
It's a line written into almost every love song in one form or another. The cliche' is to rhyme it with a line that ends in "Fire".
See if you can come up with something original. Let me know how you would finish this off and avoid the cliche. I am not trying to write this as a song, just want to challenge you a bit.
Something to make love to , no doubt....dgatwood said:You're the one that I desire,
ahead of the curve, a love outlier....
Come with me and we'll retire.
Our writhing bodies will perspire,
as I take you higher and higher and higher....
Rokket said:Something to make love to , no doubt....![]()
dgatwood said:But only if the girl's a math major.
Sadly, the use of the word 'outlier' significantly limits the song's appeal.![]()
Pretty good, but it needs to be funny without a back story....dgatwood said:So... let's say a bunch of long-lost pages of the LOTR trilogy are found that explain something about Gandalf's love life... maybe containing something like this:
You're the one that I desire---
the hottest chick in all the shire.
So what if I stand three feet higher,
my sweet Maria MacIntyre?
It's edging out the competition (mostly for that last line), but I want a couple more submissions.ez_willis said:
Feels like my dicks on fire
Or like its been in a dryer
Now I know that you’re a liar
And you look like Richard Pryor
Your sign said “pussy for hire”
Why did I become the buyer
Now the one that I admire
Is my Penicillin supplier
How's that?