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[K-dub]

"People just like you" Critique

Yes, I know it's a stupid thread title. I wrote it to get attention (because a recent submission went uncommented on), later thought it was stupid and tried to change it, but NOOOO. Once it's named, it's named. Oh well.

Hopefully this one will generate some comment...it's a brand new work in a straight rock vein. In general, what I'm looking to solicit is mix comments (or more specifically, is the piece overly compressed). Thanks!

People just like you

It's the story of someone taken/burned by evangelicals...

People just like you

Well I gave everything I had to give
To people just like you
And I learned my lesson way to well
You can tell that I'm no fool

Yeah, I gave everything I had
To people just like you
And it's sad to say
but it turned out bad

So I'll never trust another one like you

Maybe some simple minds might not see through the sham
Heaven help if you've been "saved"
And though the message spins on endlessly
There's really nothing much of worth conveyed

Because I gave everything I had
To people just like you
And it's sad to say
But it's just no good

So I'll never trust another one like you

Oh no, don't sing me no sweet song
Don't sell me your snake oil
I'm tired of listening to you

Oh no, just keep your damn distractions
I've had a bad reaction
I'm hyper-allergic to you

Because I gave everything I had
To people just like you
And I must complain
It's plain brainwashing

So I'll never trust another one like you

Oh no, don't sing me no choir songs
No more holy rollers
I'm tired of paying those dues

So go and stuff your benedictions
Kick out the addiction
That's conspiring to control you

Because I gave everything I had
To people just like you
And it's sad to say, but it's all untrue
So I'll never trust another one like you

No, I'll never trust another one like you.

BTW- Please to remember I'm a storyteller. This is a perspective piece, it's not autobiographical. It's told from a fictional character's perspective.



K-

 

[G-String]

C'mon K-Dub, there's good people in all walks of life. There's good.....how do I say this...church goin'folk, as well as just plain Evil church goin' folks. I think there are drug dealin' folks who would turn around and give you even what they don't have to give....if you needed it. Because their hearts are good. Tell me if I'm wrong, but I think you know who god is, because sometimes you seem (to me) like you run from him?

The reason I am not directly responding to the lyrics of your song is, because I haven't heard the song. Maybe you wanted a response to how you are explaining how you feel instead. Maybe I'm wrong.

 

[K-dub]

C'mon K-Dub, there's good people in all walks of life.

Absolutely! Without any question.

There's good.....how do I say this...church goin'folk, as well as just plain Evil church goin' folks.

Agree wholeheartedly again.

I think there are drug dealin' folks who would turn around and give you even what they don't have to give....if you needed it. Because their hearts are good.

Without a doubt, that's possible.

Tell me if I'm wrong, but I think you know who god is, because sometimes you seem (to me) like you run from him?

Not at all. My personal beliefs have nothing to do with this lyric. As I explained above, it is not autobiographical, it is written from another's perspective...whomever that other person may be...it's a story. I've not explained/revealed any of my personal beliefs in this work. There's nothing for me to run from.

The reason I am not directly responding to the lyrics of your song is, because I haven't heard the song. Maybe you wanted a response to how you are explaining how you feel instead. Maybe I'm wrong.

Sometimes a cigar is just a cigar, G. Although if the intent of a lyric (or any art) is to elicit a strong emotion (good or otherwise) from people, these lyrics seem to do the job.

Give the song a listen, it's only rock and roll, maybe you'll like it.



Best-

K-

 

[G-String]

O.K. I'm in better understanding now. I see where you're coming from.

 

[Markaholic]

i like it..good groovin feel...vocals seem a bit loud though

 

[K-dub]

G- Glad you're cool w/ it now.

Markaholic- Glad you liked it. Vocals way out front is the current happenin' sound. Actually, I mixed w/ a similar modern tune side by side...and the vocals on that one were out front as much too. It seems that's the way it's done commercially these days. If I take the vocal back, it seems to disappear into the mix and loses the definition. I suppose if I were to submit this somewhere, I'd do several mixes w/ the vocal all over the place and let the folks "in the know" choose whichever version they wanted. Thanks for commenting. Did you think the whole thing was a little too compressed?

Best,

K-

 

[G-String]

K-dub, hey I liked the song. Its not at all what I expected. From the lyrics, I expected it to be dark. What all instruments do you play? Did you just sing the lyrics or what? you are very talented.

 

[K-dub]

Hey G-

I don't play the drums, the lead guitar (w/fills), and the rhythm guitar that plays at about 9:00 o'clock left on the dial. That's played by my friend...the former guitarist of my band.

Everything else (including the writing) is me.

I'm not sure what sort of "dark" thing you anticipated...but as I said before, it's only rock and roll...glad ya liked it.



K