Darker Side - Metal Song

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Please give your feedback on my song and mix.

https://soundcloud.com/jonathan-linton-3/darker-side-20140222

DARKER SIDE
(Words and music by Jonathan Linton)

It lives in the dark of the night
Everywhere but out of sight
Fighting the forces of light

It lives inside of you
In hate and anger it breaks through
Then it controls what you do

BRIDGE
Deep down inside every human soul
Dormant it waits to take control

It’s your darker side
Its presence cannot be denied
It takes control and you abide
Decent to evil you will slide
It’s your darker side

Best defense is know it’s there
Confess sins with daily prayer
Keep evil in its lair

Try you like it’s certainty
Given right opportunity
Will become your identity

BRIDGE
Deep down inside every human soul
Dormant it waits to take control

It’s your darker side
Its presence cannot be denied
It takes control and you abide
Decent to evil you will slide
It’s your darker side

SOLO:
2 x VERSE
4 x BRIDGE

It’s your darker side
Its presence cannot be denied
It takes control and you abide
Decent to evil you will slide
It’s your darker side

It’s your darker side
Its presence cannot be denied
It takes control and you abide
Decent to evil you will slide
It’s your darker side
 
Pretty good song and doesn't sound too bad either. Reminds me of old 80s metal like Dio meets Mega-llica etc. Some of the vocal harmonies sound a little off; Deep inside every human "SOUL", for example. Could use a little work. Other than little things like that, it's not too bad. :thumbs up:
 
It sounds a bit awkward to me, as though the lyrics were written at a different time than the music. Its very hard to make out the words because of that. The production is a bit dated, but sounds good, I think there is still a market for that genre. Good job!
 
I thought the crunch guitars needed more power. I think too much gain was used when they were recorded. They're kind of thin and fizzy. In addition I think they need more low and low-midrange.

I'd cut back on the reverb used on the lead vocal. Ditto for the guitar solo.

The clean guitar sounded pretty good.

Drums were so-so. They sounded fine, but the part was a little lackluster.

The bass is really tough to hear.

I'm probably being a little too critical. The energy to the song was good.
 
Damn.. this takes me back to the late 80s.. :D
The improved mix definitely sounds better to me. Good job!

cheers
 
HugoRibeiro.Com said:
Damn.. this takes me back to the late 80s.. :D
The improved mix definitely sounds better to me. Good job!

cheers
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Hi Hugo,

Thanks for the feedback! Definitely 80's inspired but still cool I think. Are you critiquing the Youtube live soundtrack or the Soundcloud track?

Regards,

Jonathan
 
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