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Hmmm... Normally I'm all for cheesy and strange synth sounds, but this one didn't really do it for me.
I think a lot of your sounds (especially the strings and bass) just sound like Casio or Garageband presets making it sound "fake" (and not in a good way).
The actual mix is balanced pretty well. Everything seems to be sitting together pretty well
I suppose the biggest thing would be to pick better sounds then.
The weird squealy sounds you used sounded OK, but all of the stringed instrument synths were pretty bad. Also, I'm not sure how to describe it, but the melody on the right around 2:37. That synth is pretty weak too.
I don't know all the capabilities of your Yamaha, but hopefully it's got some good stuff on there!
The sounds didn't bug me as much as they did VHS. Just differences of opinion.
The only thing I'd say is that kick is pretty loud.