Aaron Cheney
Favorite Chord: C 6/9
5) Metaphors. Don't tell the story.... Create an image for the listener. For example, don't say "the stars where white and twinkly in the dark blue sky"... INstead say, "the stars were diamonds in sapphire blue.." Much more interesting.
I admit that I haven't listened to the song; I'm giving my opinion based on the lyrics only. I hope some of my advice at least sparked some thought. Keep on writing!
Aaron
http://www.voodoovibe.com
p.s.Sorry for the fragmented post. For some reason my browser crashes whenever I submit long posts, and I'm tired of typing for a half an hour and losing it all.
I admit that I haven't listened to the song; I'm giving my opinion based on the lyrics only. I hope some of my advice at least sparked some thought. Keep on writing!
Aaron
http://www.voodoovibe.com
p.s.Sorry for the fragmented post. For some reason my browser crashes whenever I submit long posts, and I'm tired of typing for a half an hour and losing it all.