check this one out, need some critics

[Osbauro]

First mix... need some help...
please hear the song and say what you think, i can handle it

It´s a me jamming with myself kind of song and it was good to at least get some practice...

won´t take anymore of your time,
thank you
http://www.soundclick.com/bands/2/psylocibedoommusic.htm

But if want to know:

I was going to let u guess what i used to record but i thought better and i think its easier for you to help me if you know the source of the sounds

ok so here it is

Ibanez guitar-> marshall g30r cd (kinda borrowed) -> shure beta58( not mine and taped with a pencil, for it is broken in the middle) -> UB802 -> audiophile 24/96 -> recording prog

also used a borrowed keyboard(it´s been here for some months now...) to record the lame drums....

Oh and im recordind in a big and strange living room, with the amp facing the open windows (my neighbours love it) half way under the a desk facing 15° up

the mic was placed about 20 cm from the amp at an angle

How could i improve my sound?
I´m thinking about getting a sm57 and a mic preamp? would that help?

I could also go to a better acoustic enviroment, well the best i can do about it is my cousin´s farm where i could record, but it´s a lot of work.

I could also record at my bedroom... and make some wood boxes... never mind


thax again!!!! really need ur help

 

[minofifa]

not a bad little jam session there...
what were you for criticism on? the mix, the song, the performance? I thought the recording was ok. i found the rhythm and lead guitars washed togther too much. As for the performance, you have some good guitar chops but it did sound very jam-ish... lack of theme in the solo stuff and tsome of the melody (especially some of the finger tapping) sounds out of key. I can see some definate potential in this peice though.

 

[Osbauro]

thanks for the answer

well, I´d like some pointers mainly on the mix, stuff like: "that snare is too much up front it´s annoying" or "the stuff is all crazy panned were you drunk?" (consider only the first part of the exmaples )

things on recording and and overall sounding

the " i found the rhythm and lead guitars washed togther too much " kinda thing is what i´m looking for. How could I separate then a bit more? Should i pan the base guitars more to the right, more reverb on one, or less gain or something like that?

I´m glad you liked the performace (at least a tiny part of it ) there are some chops that could be used for other songs later... Also there are some muddy parts i didn´t feel like going over it´s a 2 takes kinda thing... not more... and the out of tone tappings probably occured beacause of some fourth or so that shoul´ve been avoided

thx again