Can you critique my track? (Hip Hop/Rap)

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Not my stlye but this sounds "feeling good".

I like the energy of the singing, which I figure is the point of this style. What I would do is stick in a bit where the vocal gets really up close and personal. Actually, I would probably play with it too much. Anyway, experiment with the vocal treatment for a bit more variety.

Very good
 
Lyrics are a little corny for the serious mood of the music. Recording and performance are good. Mix is good. Vocals are clear.
 
I like the levels, vox are all clear, although perhaps lowering the delay on the intro "talking" part, it was a little distracting.


I would perhaps try widening the stereo field during the choruses, and experiment with that. I think you could get a little differentiation/ movement to the song without blatantly exciting the chorus or anything.
 
@Tobe - I am still trying to experiment with vocals a little more. (I don't like my voice so thats the real reason, lol) but I will def try more things. Thanks!

@PDP - Yeah like Tobe said i was feeling real good when I made this song. haha

@tjwheelinnj - Thanks I was def unsure about the intro part but I kept it anyway cuz i didn't think i sounded too bad. Can you explain more about widening the chorus? Im use to stacking em a few times, (maybe panning) and throwing some reverb and some eq on em..
 
impact,

Everybody hates their own voice, you are sounding very good (don't fear getting right into the ear). I don't know much about producing rap, but I know enough that duets/tandem singing is very common in the genre, and there is no reason you can't tandem yourself. I would look for sections of the song where you could play different parts, or you could even do a really "corny" up close "alter ego" section telling yourself off and/or another "alter ego" section egging yourself on... But I don't know what I am talking about... you sound pretty good to this untrained ear.

OR, you could have a booze hound arguing with a sober guy...

Anyway, take all this silly crap as a compliment that your song inspires ideas and pay no attention :-) .
 
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I liked the instrumentation. Except the snare sample. Kind of wimpy.

Good vocal delivery. Good vocal arrangement. They sound nice and clear.

Mix kind of lacks a low end. Nothing down there.
 
TripleM said:
I liked the instrumentation. Except the snare sample. Kind of wimpy.

Good vocal delivery. Good vocal arrangement. They sound nice and clear.

Mix kind of lacks a low end. Nothing down there.
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Yeah I have no monitors to judge the low end well, just radio speakers hooked up to my pc. I have been shopping for monitors but I hear it won't do me any good until I can treat the room. Thanks I will work on the though. And thanks on the insight for the snares.
 
Not really my cup of tea. Everything is working well together though, except there is no low end. This is hip-hop man! Where's the bass?
 
impact87 said:
Yeah I have no monitors to judge the low end well, just radio speakers hooked up to my pc. I have been shopping for monitors but I hear it won't do me any good until I can treat the room. Thanks I will work on the though. And thanks on the insight for the snares.
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No, monitors will make a difference, a big difference compared to your listening chain...I bet half us dont have room treatment, sure it would make life a little easier but its not essential...


on the song

yup bottom end is MIA...apart from that the instrumentation is pretty well done, simple and not distracting, I agree with the snare being a bit week..compress it a bit more and bring it up..make it crack. Rap is very good, clear, bang on the beat to my ears..you've got a good voice and plenty of skill..

Its not really a genre i listen to much nowadays but I couldnt help thinking a breakdown or some samples cutting in later on wouldve kept the interest going, maybe some other instrumentation...dunno, do you listen to much dubstep? some of the breakdowns and instrumentation in that would sound excellent being mixed in with hip hop


anyway good job man :)
 
Ok, here's my deal with the low end.. When I first did the beat, it had HELLA bass to where it didn't sound good(sounded distorted) when I was recording the vocals, so I had to cut most if it out when I mixed the track down. I'm going to go back a work on it tho and repost it here.

SideNote: I made the beat BEFORE I knew I could mix in FL studio..:eek: Yeah smh
 
impact87 said:
Ok, here's my deal with the low end.. When I first did the beat, it had HELLA bass to where it didn't sound good(sounded distorted) when I was recording the vocals, so I had to cut most if it out when I mixed the track down. I'm going to go back a work on it tho and repost it here.

SideNote: I made the beat BEFORE I knew I could mix in FL studio..:eek: Yeah smh
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remember to mix quite low...around -14db...then bounce the project down to a stereo wave file and bring up its loudness in a separate project..


If your mixing everything with the faders right up it could be why the bass is clipping and distorting while being at the wrong volume for the track
 
Yeah, what he said. Plus, take a look at the waves maxxbass plugin. It's a good way to trick the brain into hearing bass through psychoacoustics without adding mud.
 
Impact,

The percussive bass sounds are very fat and fill the bottom end more than enough... and they sound contemporary. Don't go buying plug-ins...

You have a great rapping voice, don't get distracted (too far) from it.
 
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