Broken Toy

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Hi. Please listen to the refrain and tell me whats the ups or downs.. :)

heh.. and if possible, maybe you should try to listen to the melodi, not the lyric. I had nothing to sing about, and my english isn`t that good.. I don`t believe it`s a sign of depression.. :) I was trying to create a "sound/feeling" and did it pretty fast.

http://www.freewebs.com/ashymusic/
 
Nice job,

I really like your voice and the harmonies are really cool! I think it is a pretty tasteful use of synth, although there are a lot of people here that don't like synth. But I think if you use it and have a sound song and melody, it works out well.

This is a pretty catchy song.

Nice work,

-jD
 
To be honest, when the song started, I was unsure of where it was going to go, and whether I was gonna like it. Then the chorus hit. I really like it! I like the vocal harmonies, and the synth accents placed around...

Yeah... Great chorus.

I like the chord structure, too. Quite unique.

Heh.... The song is almost done, and I haven't even realized I wasn't critiquing the mix. This is generally a good thing, because there's nothing that jumps out at me like a sore thumb, so good mixing, too!

Keep it up!
 
The vocals are excellent in this song. The lower harmonies are just right to compliment the main higher vocals. I thought durong the second refrain it could be louder on the harmony part. Very good song too!!

:):D:):D
 
Thank you for the comments. I guess there is nothing much to change then?

Only the verse.. Maybe I should put in something extra on guitar to fill the short melodi... and maybe change the whole melodi on the verse.
 
Another thumbs up here. Really good song, good recording - 3 minutes? Very modest, maybe too modest. An intro would be good here, something to get your attention before the vocals come in. Also I think the reverb on the vocals makes them a bit too remote. You've a nice voice (assuming it is your voice) and it seems like a good recording - I think I'd like to hear them more in your face (although I'm not sure because the effect you've used reminds me of Stephin Merritt whom I adore). Good stuff.
 
Thanks again beatlebum! I`ll make an intro and post an updated version. :)
 
The vocals are the stronest element no doubt, but I pretty much hated the rest - the beat was too loud and too stodgy, and all the sounds used were ... well, lame for the lack of a better word. I kinda appreciated the way it was arranged musically - I mean it's pretty perfunctory and all but it works, though I didn't think the chorus was all that outstanding (it's all in the vocals I think).
 
Thanks guys. M1Fanatic, glad you liked it.

I guess you`re right, Mensch. I recorded a simple drumgroove and copied and pasted it through the song. I dont have any cymbals so I perhaps overuse the snare and fill in with some percussion.. The synthsounds are simple and not wellplayed.

Maybe because Im a vocalist and a composer, without a band. :D
 
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