Bottom of Heaven.

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The doubled acoustic guitar could be a bit tighter.

I like the vocal sound. You might want to raise the levels of both vocal tracks a nudge.

The bass is maybe 2-4dbs too loud. Tone is pretty nice.

Drums sound a bit programmed.
 
Left voice (high) is coming across a touch sharp here and there... maybe not so noticeable were it not for the lower range octave vocal on the other side.

Electric guitar sound is a bit "simmy" for me.

What was going to happen after the abrubt cutoff?

Gratuitous arrangement advice - the acoustic guitar solo wasn't compelling enough for me... and in the 5 seconds before 4:30 the electric solo seems to come off the rails a little.

Agree with TripM about the drums / bass... good start. :thumbs up:
 
Sorry forgot to mention its going to be faded out but I'm not gonna worry about that until I finalize the mix.

Thanks for being honest about the acoustic solo, I had similar thoughts I'll do a few more takes see if I can get something better.
 
Agree with what others have said. It's a promising start. Bass is too loud, vocal too low for me, pitchy in spots. Both on the strummed intro and the solo, the acoustic playing could have been cleaner and more fluid. The acoustic and electric solos both consisted of noodling in the pentatonic. Why not use the solo to make a melodic statement instead? One idea is to borrow from and extend the vocal melody
 
thanks Robus, I will probably do that. I recorded the solos before the vocals were added so I'll it admit it was pentatonic noodling. I'm gonna try and mic up my amp instead of using the amp sim also. Can't do that today though, for the meantime I lowered the bass, uped the vocals and tweaked the drums. Heres a new version.

https://soundcloud.com/ben-2014/bottom-of-heaven-demo-5

Also I added some fills, would like to know if you guys think they add or take away from the song. I'm thinking of changing the drums back to their simpler form.
 
Not noticing a lot of difference in the drums. Sounds like you've got the doubled louder than what sounds like it should be the lead.
 
Like the push of the song....Vocaks a smidge too low for me. I would experiment with effects on 1st solo solo...bring in some pads halfway through.....i was gonna suggest shortening solo and you went into the Double solo....lol

Creative choice, just not one I would personally do....of course im a Singer/Songwriter so thst is probably my bias.

Keep working on this....It's worth it
 
Just 2c worth. I think the song could use some variation. Something to break up the chord pattern that goes on for 5 minutes. TBH, I was ready to shut it down after 3...
Having said that, I think the song has great potential. You've got some fairly interesting lyrics going, you're definitely a better guitar player than I am and I think you could come up with something if you just jam over the solo sections a few times. The bass has good tone for the song and the vocal part is a tried and true system...just needs cleaned so they match a bit better (performance and pitch). :)
 
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