Black Dog

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I am at work so I cant listen to it yet...is it Zep's Black Dog??
 
kind cool mush ... :D
it is long ... I listened to the whole thing ... phew ...
one thing to make it more interesting you got to go to double time on drums somewhere in the song ... maybe even come in and out ... I kept waiting for it and it never came ... I think it would be a must for this one IMHO ... you probably going to have to clear some better space for the vocals.. and bring them up ... they are kind of cool ... i would call this "middle eastern whaw-whaw" :D ...

guitars could be more spread out I think ...
the mix is pretty good but vocals defenetly get lost at times and the shreder guitar is behind the drumer... actualy everyone is behind the drumer ... the drummer is in the audience ... :D

The best/clearest part is at about 3:43 and on ... maybe you pulled one guitar out or something ...

certantly interesting piece... I think you are going to have more commments on this ... not sure if evryone will sit to the end though :D

cheers
 
Sorry King Elvis,it's not Zep's"Black Dog"!
Thanx for the input Fed.Just what I need.I agree the drums are a bit too upfront,and the vox to far back.I want as much input as I can get,then I'll try to put the advice to good use.
 
how's it hangin', beelzebub??

... had to steal that line from "Bill & Ted's Part II"...

This is a cool song... reminds me of AIC... other's'll prolly say that, too. Only thing that sticks out is the weak bridge part 'n I think it's weak because of the walky bass line under it. Take that for what it's worth cuz you're a jamfester and I'm just some words on a page... maybe don't even exist! :eek:

The verse/chorus thing works really well, tho. The part I'm talking about that needs reworked (the bridge) goes "Black Dog, you devil... (couldn't make out the rest.. drums got in the way)"

Mix/recording has issues, but others can step in there. Nice start!


"BLACK DOOOOOG YOU SUNNNUVVVA BITCH!!" :p

Chad
 
Cool song. I liked the guitar riff - nice hook. I like the whole feel of the song. The vocals sounded like Ozzy to me.

I thought the vocals were getting a bit covered up by the guitars. There is a lot of guitar stuff going on. And while the guitars all sit together pretty nicely, they beat up the vocals. Maybe some EQing of the guitars to get them out of the way might help.

It's a bit long.
 
Good mix bubba! I agree that the drums might be a bit too front (especially the crash) and it is a long song, but overall a nice job I think! :)
 
Great drum programming (just move it back a bit more.) What gear/spftware did you use and how did you sequence?
 
cool intro!!.....like it....someone who actually took the time to program the drums to fit....nice....i agree w/chad on the "alice in chains"..sound to the vox...but not so much in the verse....i like the sheer amount of guitar in this without covering each other all up...however the vox are a bit to low....but im listening on crap comp speakers so......nice guitar lead ..ROCK!!!!......i didnt read all this thread..is all of this you?....sorta loses momentum..."you make me feel........maybe just me....you have a cool voice tho alitlle too masked in effects....we wanna hear you...lol..some of the background vox altho not outta tune seem to be hitting the wrong harmonies for the song?..that make sense...??..hope so...


ok i confess i stopped after the bridge...

very cool song tho...this could be a REALLY COOL song with a little help...listen to those who will do just that...

good luck....work on this.....

jamal
 
Very cool tune. Would like to hear the vocals a little more up front. Maybe put the guits up a little more in front of the drums. I like the guitar parts. Nice job. This is music after my own heart.
 
Nothing in particular that is the MAIN offender to me. Little bits of improvement could happen here and there, but the song is of average quality to me. I found it hard to go past the 3 min mark...and by that time, the wah wah had its way with me...click...

I think some HARD core metal fans might enjoy this, but I found it kinda unmusical...just going thru the motions.
 
Hey beezelbubba,

I liked the overall sound and structure of the tune. The length of the song is warranted.

The drums (which sounded really dence, full and powerful to my ears) were a little overbearing. I'l lower them in the mix.

That wah wah git might be better placed further to the left and lowered some. It seems to muck up the center and take away from your git fills on the right. Think texture, not dominance.

The vox would do well to increase by a db or so. I like the tone of the vox but, it sits too far back. Your saying alot in the tune so, give the singer some.....

You build a moody, morose and earnest sonic sound!! Let the equally effective and well constructed arrangment get its just dues by letting the git fills and dynamic changes become more prominent in the mix.

One last thing to add to this list of opinion.....................For a 6 minute + song to end on a cold stop, I want more of a climax!!
An intensity in vocal delivery (verging on an angst ridden scream or multiple harmony backups) or a building rhythme coupled with a short git shred fest or a combination thereof are my suggestions. In short, make that "cold stop" bold, cold, climatic and tight!!!

Just a bunch of single minded impressions........cool tune dude.

Theron.
 
Wall of guitars!!

Ive been O.D.ing on my acoustic lately, so this sounds mighty fine to me.

Sounds like you had fun with this one.

I like it.

GT
 
Well I like the thing. I don't insist on every song being 3:30 so its length didn't bother me. The vocals are a little too far back in the mix. Also I wouldn't pull the drums back too much....they sound pretty strong.
The guitars sound cool to me...I like the big wall of sound. I do occasionally hear some putch issues with the vox.
 
Participant:AIC was laregly what I was looking for.
TripleM:Ozzy and Sabbath are also largely what I was looking for.
Barometer:Thanx dude!
VirualSamana:glad you liked the programming,I record w/N-Track and program drums w/PCDrummer pro.
jamal buchet:I agree,that the vox are too low,I'm gonna do a new mix soon.I may or may not fix the parts that sound a little outta key.Depends how much they bug me.Yes,I played and programmed everything.
Hangdawg:A man after my own heart!
Mixmkr:I AM a hardcore metal fan.I agree,it's a very avg.piece of music.Your opinion is respected and well taken!
Theron:I will definately try your ideas in a future mix.I will also give some thought to a better ending.
GT:I have had fun w/this,as well as lost some hair.I think I'll lose more before it's done!
A Reel Person:Thanx Dave!!
Lt.Bob:The length of the song isn't an issue to me either,though I do wan't folks to listen!I cut a minute or so off it,but it's still 6:50 or so!Screw it,it may be a bit tiresome,but it flows the way I envisioned it.
By the way,can you define "putch" for me?
Thanx to all for listening!
 
:D
putch....the process of generating saliva through vocal exercises and/or twinkies.
You're welcome!


( I meant pitch of course)
 
very a.i.c. in fact its uncanny:confused: nice job!!
theron got it with the wah git. althought it sound's great...it was hard to focus on anything else. i even found myself mouthing the word WAH along to your git. he he:D

thanks for sharing man

peace

rick
 
I really liked it!

I think the production and writing were way above average for this style of music.

The harmonized lead was great,and the wah was just the right touch,mabey just a little too biting for the whole song.

I especially liked the vocals,clear and well done.

Good stuff.

Pete
 
Thanx fenderlikin',you know firsthand I can't keep my foot off the damn wah!I will try to make it play nice in a future mix,though.Thanx for listening!
muzeman:I'm glad you think the vox were ok!It is the single biggest struggle for me(followed by excessive wah wanking and song length).
 
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