Another collaberation

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I am not sure this one is ready for human ears yet, but oh well.

This time it's almost a full band:

Me: bass and rhythm guitars

BentRabbit: drums

7string: lead guitars and the harmony arppegios

joeym: vocals

I wrote it, but these guys made it a song.

So is it ready for consumption or should I put it back in the oven?


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I remember this one! :o

I hear a few things that jump out to me.

1) The drums are very thin and bright. The snare lacks a lot of meat. The drums overall lack power. The kick is almost non-existant.

2) The rhyhtm guitars and kind of thin sounding too. They need some low end power.

3) Solo has great tone, but it's too dry and in your face. Especially in the beginning. It might sound better with fatter rhythms around it.

Overall I like what you've done with the song and everyone's parts are done very well. It's just some mix/processing things that are holding this back.
 
Too much cutting on my end. I'll remix it tomorrow when my ears are rested. It's 3 AM! :eek:

Thanks for the listen and the spot on analysis, Greg!
 
Greg_L has already addressed most of the things I would suggest, the drums need to be more prominent in the mix-louder and maybe compression to fill them out. The rhythm guitars have the same staccato chop throughout-a variation would give the song a better flow. I think that a cleaner tone part with a chorus or phaser would help the rhythm some-tremolo might be cool in spots as well..I'm kinda imagining how the Cars would have arranged it.
 
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Good song that could be potentially great with a few tweaks. Drums have been mentioned. Vocals could come up a bit. Some guitar fills could go down a bit. Rhythm guit could use more presence, maybe double track. It's all there, just a little TLC.
 
Thanks for the comments and suggestions. I'll get to work on this one a little later and see what I can come up with. I goofed when I sent Joe the song to add his vocals because I didn't put the lead guitar on what I sent him, and the two parts are fighting for space during the adlibs on the second and third chorus parts. I have to figure out how to get some air in there.
 
Apart from previous comments concerning intrumentation.....crank the vocal up a notch or two.......IMO.

Good stuff, Rok!
 
Rokket said:
Made some changes. Same link above. Am I close yet?
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Yes, everything is much better balanced-those arpeggios being panned at the beginning sound really good. The lead sounds much better as well-it was just processing that it needed.
JoeyM sounds great on this-theres some Dio in his singing style here-my opinion anyway.
 
Anfontan said:
Yes, everything is much better balanced-those arpeggios being panned at the beginning sound really good. The lead sounds much better as well-it was just processing that it needed.
JoeyM sounds great on this-theres some Dio in his singing style here-my opinion anyway.
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Yeah, I find that he's really Irom Maiden influenced. If I had figured that one out sooner... :o

I really like what he's done with the song. There's no way I could have sung it like that.
 
Rokket said:
Yeah, I find that he's really Irom Maiden influenced. If I had figured that one out sooner... :o

I really like what he's done with the song. There's no way I could have sung it like that.
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I wish Joe would chime in. I am not sure I got the adlibs in the right spot. :confused:
 
Rokket said:
I wish Joe would chime in. I am not sure I got the adlibs in the right spot. :confused:
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Here I am...damn Internet connection is playing up again (I could strangle the provider right now...)

You're right, the adlibs have to be synchronised a bit better, they come in a little bit too early. The mix I sent you of the whole song has them in the right place, maybe you could hear that as a guide. Otherwise it's basically the stuff that Greg said and maybe a little less reverb or delay on the voice in the verse.

It's coming along just fine though, Eddie ;)

Cheers
Joe
 
joeym said:
Here I am...damn Internet connection is playing up again (I could strangle the provider right now...)

You're right, the adlibs have to be synchronised a bit better, they come in a little bit too early. The mix I sent you of the whole song has them in the right place, maybe you could hear that as a guide. Otherwise it's basically the stuff that Greg said and maybe a little less reverb or delay on the voice in the verse.

It's coming along just fine though, Eddie ;)

Cheers
Joe
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OK........ :D


Now where did I save that sample at? :o
 
Anfontan said:
Yes, everything is much better balanced-those arpeggios being panned at the beginning sound really good. The lead sounds much better as well-it was just processing that it needed.
JoeyM sounds great on this-theres some Dio in his singing style here-my opinion anyway.
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Hey Anfontan,
DIO is one of my gods and Maiden bring back fond memories......:D
Thanx for the compliment!
Joe
 
joeym said:
HA,HA, it happens to you too?:D
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Yes, dammit!

Not only did I not save it where I could find it (I think it was in a folder I deleted, I'm a putz), but I saved all of your emails except that one... :mad:
 
joeym said:
Here I am...damn Internet connection is playing up again (I could strangle the provider right now...)

Joe
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I know the feeling-we have about 20,000 new students back at SIU for the new semester-this weekend it's just crawling most of the time, and thats with DSL.....

You've got great phrasing with the vocal part-damned good job.:D
 
So I've only listened to the second mix, but it sounds pretty good.

The multi-tracked, chorusy sound on the vocals in the chorus is really good.

The bass sounded like it might have hit a few sour notes in some places. Actually, this is probably the only time you'll hear me say this, but the bass is probably coming through a little too much. It's really sticking out and not settling in with the rest of the instruments.

The guitars sound good though. I think you've got it at least 90% of the way there.
 
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