Anotha One from me...

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Telling me that it sucks is better than saying nothing...
 
wow, i like it...it's very chill very laid back...something i would listen too...nice job!
 
I think you need to work more on your flow, cause I can't hear one at the moment...also you're stressing your way through parts of the track that just ruins the rest of it. If you ever in a situation where you think: "I only fell off the beat once/twice, messed up a small portion of the full track" or whatever, think about this: That small portion of mess up in the track, even if it's just a small 1% of the track, is enough to fuck up the entire track. If you can't hold it steady for a few bars, no one will ever give you credit for a nice track. Also, work on your vocabulary. Some of them rhymes are just to easy.

Otherwise, keep it up
 
Although I agree with much of what 92 said, it is a step above your last stuff you posted, which means you're moving in the right direction......
As mentioned before and again in this thread, you need to keep working on your flow......You sound so uncomfortable behind that mic! It's like you're reading your lyrics for the FIRST TIME...... But the more you practice and get comfortable in your role, the better it will sound.
I'm gonna ask you the same question I asked you last time. Can you hear the things we are pointing out to you? Like, did you notice you were stumbling over your lyrics before you posted?
 
Yeah I hear those things...like sometimes I try to fit too many words for example. Or I go to fast and end up screwing up.

But is that really all I have to fix? Cuz I can fix that in like 2 seconds...
 
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Physical Ill said:
Yeah I hear those things...like sometimes I try to fit too many words for example. Or I go to fast and end up screwing up.

But is that really all I have to fix? Cuz I can fix that in like 2 seconds...
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Well, that is what stands out as far as vocally! I'm not going to get into lyrics, because that is a matter of opinion, which is normally influenced by age, social environment, and the ability to express yourself lyrically. But I think it is important that you can hear your mistakes. I would be afraid if you thought it was flawlessly dope!!!:eek:
 
Some things you can fix "just like that", other things is more of a "time and experience" kinda thing.
Trumpspade's got a few good points to take into concideration in his last post.
A: You're capable of hearing your own mistakes (That's probably half the solution...)
B: The lyrics is a matter of taste...to a certain length I agree to that, but the age, social environment and skills in expression is far more important.

When you've done this for awhile you're gonna develope a flow of your own. It's like this:
When you rap now, you don't sound to sure of yourself. I hear what you say, I just don't feel it.
What I'm trying to say here is: "Say it like you mean it..."

Oh...and don't try to fit in to many words...
If you wanna nail a girl you wouldn't beat around the bush saying all the things you didn't need to say, when in fact some chicks just need to hear: "I wanna **** you!"
 
You're improving man, it's not where it needs to be at yet, but it's progress homie....that's what you want anyway. Like Trump said, you do feel a little uncomfortable in your delivery. Here's my suggestion...and it might sound bad, but it really isn't.

Go and download John Cena's CD (or just get Chingo Bling's track "HUSTLE" with him on the third verse) and study that shit. You vocals kind of remind me of that shit. He might be a wrestler, but his flow is decent. That's going to be your starting point. Watch how he fits his shit and shows confidence with the mic. I'm gonna remember this shit I said when you show up with your next track. Let's see some improvement kid.

Don't be afraid of the mic in the studio...mistakes can always be fixed or enhanced.

Fie.
 
Yeah yeah I get what yall are sayin...next one is gonna be another step up
 
I always like this beat....
lyrically its aight not bad at all....
but your flow needs work...... Only thing I would say will fix that is just practice and time behind the mic......
even though its a short joint I would say throw a hook on there 2...

my 2 copper coins
 
yeah it sarted off cool i was listening then it kinda lost me
but it was cool tho,,keep doing it,,,and fools gave feed,,,some cool feedback




yeah there's some things you can do to improve,you always gone do that tho
 
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