Am I getting close?

[Todzilla]

Here's a tune I'm working on that I previously submitted to the Songwriting forum: www.toddejones.com/songs/The Trap.mp3.

I pretty psyched about the rough mix sound, but I'd love some honest feedback about how to make the final mix better.

thanx

 

[Dogman]

You need to edit your link.

Song is pretty cool. I think you've mixed the sounds very well. It's a nice, clean mix. Fun listen also...I like the drums, as I can hear everything going on. Bass seems to have a good place to sit, and the key parts sound good. Don't know if they could come up a db or 2 without changing what you have in mind for the tune. They seem quiet, but that might be what you want. Guitars seem mixed well, and have a good sound. I got nothing I can help you with really, but think it's sounding pretty good. Really liked the drum sound....seems very clean.
And the ending...it's a long fade out, but still cuts off abruptly. I think you should cut it right after you finish a sentence, like about 4 seconds sooner, as it would end a little cleaner.

Cool tune man.

 

[Todzilla]

Yep, I needed to fix the link. Damn Treo phone.

Here it is:

Thanks in advance for feedback.

 

[Todzilla]

You need to edit your link.

Song is pretty cool. I think you've mixed the sounds very well. It's a nice, clean mix. Fun listen also...I like the drums, as I can hear everything going on. Bass seems to have a good place to sit, and the key parts sound good. Don't know if they could come up a db or 2 without changing what you have in mind for the tune. They seem quiet, but that might be what you want. Guitars seem mixed well, and have a good sound. I got nothing I can help you with really, but think it's sounding pretty good. Really liked the drum sound....seems very clean.
And the ending...it's a long fade out, but still cuts off abruptly. I think you should cut it right after you finish a sentence, like about 4 seconds sooner, as it would end a little cleaner.

Cool tune man.

Thanks for the feedback!

Yeah, the fade was a result of a quick dump down from Digital Performer. I had the master fader doing the master fade out and had to reassign outputs so that... well, yeah, I need to redo the fade.

As for the piano, well it is the only remaining original track, which has since been layered with the pieces you now hear. I first figured this would be a keys/bass/drums piece with vox on top, but I like the guitar stuff I was able to conjure, so the piano fell out of the mix a bit.

I'm still hearing unevenness of some of the vocals going from part to part, thanks largely to having up to 6 passes of unison vox in places. That'll get wrangled in the remix, plus the disharmony on the word "friend" in the second verse.

 

[Bartman]

Very cool

Listening on work multimedia speakers so I can't comment on the mix.

I like this tune.

I hear a Frank Zappa influence combined with nice pop hooks and strong vocals. Bass line is very cool. Good performance!

Bart

 

[Todzilla]

Thanks Bart!

I welcome feedback from folks with monsterous speakers as well.

This rough mix was done on Audix 1A speakers, with some listens through a boombox with an aux in and on a set of nice Yorkville NX55p PA speakers to see how the bottom end rattles.

But it was fun to switch around and see how it sounded on the various platforms.