All I Loved in You - Burt's version

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Firstly thanks Joseph for allowing me to work on you material. Once again being free from my own lyrics and stronger ideas about my music has been incredibly liberating.

The Vs progression and melody I have had around for years and the lyric without too much re-scanning fell very nicely. My recent rediscovery of Maj9 during Mississippi led to the Pre-chorus and the Chorus just had to do that Doorsy thing and the Santanaesque guitar just seemed to follow.

There is definitely a change in direction to the song with my rearrangement of your lyrics so I have contributed a bridge of my own; it just came very organically after finding the chords.

You can hear it at here. I've called this version 'The Cutter's Song' on SoundClick , as it has seemed away from 'All I loved in You'.

Below are your lyrics, as I have worked them. I hope you like this version - great lyrics to work with, thank you.

Cheers

Burt

The Cutter's Song

Verse 1
The words you wrote are sealed inside
Alone I’ll wait and bide my time
Forever is this lonely night
Where I live to make you mine

Verse 2
Pretend I know the counting clocks
Well, maybe once upon a time
I'd like to know, I'd love to learn
What it takes to make you smile

Pre Ch
I trust I know through faith alone
What your heart will finally say, till then . . .

Chorus
I'll guard our flame of love
I'll take it to my grave
I'll guard our flame of love
Till the cutter chips away
The die of life is cast in stone
I feel it everyday
Till the cutter chips away
Cutter chips away

Verse 3
I'll count the stars you see at night
Alone I'll pray and bide my time
Forever is this lonely night
Where I live to see your eyes

Pre-Chorus

Chorus

Bridge
They say that every heart of stone
Is weathered by the rain
Then my tears should be a stonecutter’s hand
To cut some love out of this pain

Chorus
 
Whatmysay said:
Firstly thanks Joseph for allowing me to work on you material. Once again being free from my own lyrics and stronger ideas about my music has been incredibly liberating.
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Excellent, Burt! I think this is one of your best productions ever. Your vocals always remind me very much of Anthony Kiedis of the Red Hot Chili Peppers.

Excellent, strong vox, production, and music!

BTW, this my first official pseudo-collaboration. Heh. :)

Cheers,
Joseph
 
I haven't listened to this version yet.

I'm keen to try a version myself, and I don't want to be influenced by it.

I'll try it as soon as I can, but I'm kind of stuck at the moment.
 
gecko zzed said:
I'm keen to try a version myself, and I don't want to be influenced by it.

I'll try it as soon as I can, but I'm kind of stuck at the moment.
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Excellent. If it's half as good as Burt's, we're in for a good listen.

Cheers,
Joseph
 
having listened to your version, I see you have had a similar train of thought . . . i.e. to take Joseph's lyrics out of their original setting and see what happens when you shift them into a different genre.

This is a down and dirty bluesy treatment. It reminds me a bit of The Doors, and also someone else whose name won't come to mind.

I like the chord movements throughout.

I remember now . . . there's a touch of Red Hot Chilli Peppers about it as well.
 
Great version Burt. I like the way you move up the range from low to high in the various sections verse/chorus/pre, it builds nicely and gives it real flavor.
 
Tres Bonn!
I'd like a mix with less vox & more guitar but that's a matter of taste I suppose.
Your vox a really good mind - I just like 'em closer to the bed.
And the guitar lick deserve some air.
You've given this a greater sense of doom - just like Echo & the Bunnymen's The Cutter. Not the same sound - jsut the doom.
 
Thank you all for the very kind words.

I've been flat out at work and not been around - so nice to catch all the positive things

Cheers

Burt
 
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