A new tune - comments please!

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Just finished this mix, sort of a blues-rockish tune. Recorded on a Roland VS-840. I'm just starting to attempt to do my own vocals on my songs. Crank it up!

 
the acoustic gtr effect I think "crosses over" the line with too much adjustment and wavers out of tune in a negative way. Nice vocals and how the tune is introduced, and the addition of the instruments however.
An above average song, for sure and hopefully an indication of what your other stuff sounds like. I like it.
 
I think you did a really good job on the vocals.I hear some Pink Floyd influences in there for sure.Big fan?

Those Rolands have the capability of cranking out some quality tunes.A friend of mine cut 3 CD's on a VS-840GX.

Sounds good.
 
I really liked it.

Sounds like Cat Stevens singing with America(I hope that's a compliment!)

If your just starting to do your own vocals,I would say definatly stick with it,sounds great!

Really good songwriting too.

Hope to hear more,
Pete
 
Thanks everyone!

I appreciate the comments! I think I might actually loose the "underwater effect" on the opening acoustic part.

Cat Stevens... I do like his style, America too. People used to say my songs sound like Uriah Heep / April Wine / Ozzy Osbourne... I think I'm mellowing out now though, entering my America / Pink Floydish period. ;-)

- Gary
 
cool song!...really enjoyed the listen....I can understand the Cat Stevens reference....real nice vocals on this one....some things that came to mind when I was listening: the opening sounded somewhat harsh and I didn't care for the effect...BUT...at about 00:56 when everything comes in... it really sounded sweet. The keyboard at 02:01 sounded somewhat dry and stood out from the mix...I wanted to hear more of a leslie sound and swell on a full chord toward the end of the phrase....I'm curious as to what keyboard was used...good tune though and VERY nice recording!
 
very beautiful song. THanks

on these headphones though, I dont like the mix.It sounds harsh.

funk on!
 
Never miss your water till the well runs dry

Hey Schenkerguy,


Big song.

I didn't care for the fade in on the intro. Maybe let it sit at one level or introduce it with more of a slope i.e. make the intro longer and more gradual.
The git fills on the right should go up some and the keys on the left, although very fitting and well played, seemed to contradict the effect tone of the rest of the mix.
Your vocals are very solid yet, I was hoping you'd bust out with the same intensity on the vox as the rest of the song/arrangment/instruments/build. It came across as "playing it safe". I say, let the vox rip with more emotion and maybe a pitch change up if you got it in you(I sence that you do!).
The tamborine was too centered and hot. Throw that sucker to the side.
I thought the ending might have been more poiniant (sp?) if you went back to the intro. Just the acoustic and vox.

What a big song though. Everything you have works and sounds well recorded. Great writing and arrangment. I just read how many "suggestions" I've penned and I want to assure you that I don't listen this close to a song I can't grab onto. Good job so far!!!

How Did You get the song from the 840 to the comp? Have you unraveled the roland zip disk encodeing thing or did you travel a more conventional route that I'm unaware of?

Thanks for sharing a full and well crafted attempt.

Theron.
 
first off not at all my style of music,good vocalsbut...i hope this is not areal life song,like something like this happened to you cuz if it is...GET OVER IT !Top 40 here ya go,catchy hook, but way sappy
 
badmotorfinger,

Easy now,

This is the mixing forum. Not the SONGWRITING section.
Granted, there is a natural crossover but, keep the crossover productive.

Theron.
 
Good to see a fellow Calgarian on the boards schenkerguy!

I just briefly listened, but the voice is strangely familiar... You do any live work here in town?

W.
 
Sounding good. Very catchy but you might want to trim a minute or two to make it a little more demo friendly. The effect in the beginning wouldnt be so bad if there was a dry guitar mixed in with it. Vocals sound great.
 
Ok.. without reading any of the above posts. You have a great voice that works great with the song. I like the meoldy and the arrangement. The guitar on the other hand is not good. Waaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaayyyyyyy to much flange / chorus. The bass seems to be a bit too hot. Nice song though. I really like your voice. The bass is drowning the rest of the stuff out. I would like to hear it again with the bass pulled back. Super job on the song though. Solo just kicked in, good job. Works well for the tune.
Fangar
 
Your voice does sound a lot like Cat Stevens. Great tune, Great mix, but there was a little too much flange.
 
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