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I have come to the conclusion that I, being strictly a lyricist and not a true songwriter, am a bit out of my league on this bbs. While I may be decent at putting words together, I struggle to even come up with music for any of my writings, and what I do come up with changes everytime I try to...

Thank so much for the high praise! I just got to thinking one day how there was a circle of belief...as children we believe in Santa who is based on an actual person who was a bishop (if I remember correctly). Being a member of the clergy, he believed in Jesus, who died for us because God...

I Believe in You ©2006 J. Blessing In a tiny little house on the outskirts of town A precious little child laid her Christmas wishes down For a great big man with a great big heart For whom spreading Christmas cheer plays a great big part She said, Santa last year I looked hard for your sleigh...

"When You Get to Where You're Going" Here's yet another long story song by yours truly. I'm not a singer/musician so any music I may have for it in my head stays in my head and is prone to change from time to time. Also, as I warned earlier, this is a first person from a third person kinda...

I've got a partial cheat for this one...not sure how well it'll pass though...I have written a song that's a conversation between two people, neither of which are presented as myself, however the two people talk in first person...so its a first person song from two third person perspectives...

I'll see if I can come up with something, myself. I'm going through a family crisis right now, but the added emotional impact may help me to write something.

Thanks. I will end on the chorus...take out the 4th verse/tag. Also, I'm re-writing the "Dreaming of a future tall as a Kansas cornstalk" to read "Dreaming of a future wide as a Kansas cornfield." I think that makes more sense...a wide open future, as wide as he can make it as opposed to an...

Re-write of 3rd verse of Corn Silk I rewrote the third verse, not going so far into the future that he's dead and buried...and also got rid of the "bought in any store" line. Years later you could find him on a farm of 50 acres Living in the old homestead he and his wife restored He’ll teach...

If you are happy with your results, than that's perfectly fine with me. My opinion was just that, my opinion, and may mean precisely squat. I was just critiquing within all the parameters of the challenge; I guess you decided to try part of the challenge. No biggie, or skin off my nose, and I...

Thanks for the advice... I understand it's long...it's one of the longer songs I've written, but I think that's mainly because the last two verses are only one stanza, and, granted, the chorus is a bit lengthy. As for him buying the ticket twice, I didn't see it that way. I meant for the first...

here goes mine... The Devil Has Taken Him Technical (in terms of the challenge) Bravo for getting the most words from the "must have" list while maintaining a storyline, and avoiding the "taboo" words altogether. Artistic Good intro in the first verse. The second verse might could use some...

My entry I saw the words BUS, Kansas, ear, and situation and came up with the following. I call it "Corn Silk", original title was "Corn Silk Smells of Freedom." Corn Silk ©J. Blessing 2008 1 Gazing out the window of a bus traveling through Kansas He looked back on the circumstance that...

lol...I thought "Train" was out but "bus" was in... next month's challenge: writing the perfect country and western song, but it has to mention momma, trucks, trains, prison, and getting drunk. :D

So while the focus is on the chorus, we do post the whole song, right? BTW, I actually have a tune in mind for mine. Being 95% lyricist and 1% musician, I have no clue how to record and post it here...it seems to me that many of you guys have a different website you use for that purpose; what...

For the record, I'm in. Some how I found this one came easily once I focused in on a few key words. Main problem I found was those pecky Unacceptable words...taking a second look at the list I found a few of them suckers in my first verse and in my CHORUS...shame shame shame. Had to rewrite...

The above is the only little-bitty nit-picky thing I could find...basically "mine" and "mind" are too close for my comfort. I always cringe when I hear songs that rhyme a word with itself unless it's just repeating a line for a chorus. Other than that, WOW...what a song! (Can't listen to...

Hey Dave, About the word "like" being in the non-acceptable list...does that mean as in "i like you" or "it was like something" or both are unacceptable?:confused: Jeff p.s. I'm so THRILLED that you decided to make this contest about strong Choruses... :eek:especially since you know darn well...

I love writing story songs, myself. I've taken stories I've gotten off of the internet, you know, those touching stories of questionable factuality that people forward, and made a song or two from them. Also I had one that I started with just an image "Flowers by the Road" and thought of...

I sometimes plan out on paper a rough sketch of the song i.e. basic ideas for each verse and the chorus. One I wrote and shared with upfiddler started off with the basic concept of being in "God's hands." I then thought up three ways (most of my songs have 3 verses) that that could be taken...

heheheh, this song came from my own quirky sense of humor...I made the up the pun one day and thought "That could be a county song." The chorus came next, then had to come up with a few verses to go along. In the second verse, though it's hard to tell, the "other poor slob" turned out to be...