Some of my lyrics, new to rapping

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When you stare into my eyes,
You become terrified,
Because you know I'll commit homiside,
If you say something wrong,
So you better go along,
I express my thoughts and fantasies through song,
Be careful because I might of been on the bong,
 
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Trash it and try writing stuff that you wouldn't mind if your Daughter listened to it ..... Unless this is the message that you have for her.
 
Come back when you turn 12. This is obviously a 10 year old kid trying to sound like his older brother, thinking it's cool....and failing miserably.
 
Sad, Sad world. Damn that cursed rap music.

Wait ..... is it really music?
 
Some rap is good, and I can even live with a bit of swearing. I do it myself all the time when I'm with my friends. But lyrics like this reek of "insecure loser". The kind of guy that tries too hard to be cool and can't find a crowd to fit in with. You know, we all know people that try too hard and are constantly getting told to get lost.
 
RAMI said:
Some rap is good, and I can even live with a bit of swearing. I do it myself all the time when I'm with my friends. But lyrics like this reek of "insecure loser". The kind of guy that tries too hard to be cool and can't find a crowd to fit in with. You know, we all know people that try too hard and are constantly getting told to get lost.
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Yeah RAMI I see where your coming from. There is a place and time for everything.
And the lyric such as these only breed stupidity.
 
It isn't quite up to "moon, June, spoon" quality yet, but with a tweak or two I could see Rod recording his interpretation for The Great American Songbook Volume XVI.
 
Dang it, it didn't work ..... just go to the *Let me introduce myself* thread here in the newbie forum.
 
No I don't try at all, I rap my experiences and my life, how I feel. I don't try to fit in with any croud, people who rap about their life get somewhere, people who rap about a load of nonsense don't.
 
whateverman said:
No I don't try at all, I rap my experiences and my life, how I feel. I don't try to fit in with any croud, people who rap about their life get somewhere, people who rap about a load of nonsense don't.
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Ask your shrink to adjust your meds.
 
whateverman said:
No I don't try at all, I rap my experiences and my life, how I feel. I don't try to fit in with any croud, people who rap about their life get somewhere, people who rap about a load of nonsense don't.
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Yeah but still .....


Trash it and try writing stuff that you wouldn't mind if your Daughter listened to it ..... Unless this is the message that you have for her.
 
This is the opposite of Famous Dave. Famous Dave has class and clever humor. This awful shit sounds like the guy has never heard ANY Famous Dave! What a shame.
 
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