Recorded in less than 30 minutes

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No offense, but it is really hard to hear past all of the flat notes on the vox.:(
 
A few things. Lets see, first of all, this is a pretty good song. The only things are, your singing is to quiet. You need to belt it. It could also use some more instrumentation. Your voice could have a bit of low end taken out, and if I may make a suggestion, I would step the key up a few notches to give your voice some more driving power. And you do look like madonna. Just saying. That's a good thing in my book. :D

-Adam.
 
What ever you look like the verses sound like Suzanne Vega.
The guitars, particularly the verse one, sound awful - sorry.
I like the vol of the vocal - more SV again I suppose but there are pitch issues in many areas of the recording.
It sounds like you recorded it in 30min.
This could be a good song with thought, patience and effort.
Why don't you think enough of the song or yourself to give it more than 30 mins?
Please don't JordanD all over the place.
Please, don't look like Madonna - it'd be a sad thing for you to do to yourself. Platinum blonde hair & knife wound lipstick can be soooo much more - and I don't mean Deborah Harry either.
 
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propman said:
A few things. Lets see, first of all, this is a pretty good song. The only things are, your singing is to quiet. You need to belt it. It could also use some more instrumentation. Your voice could have a bit of low end taken out, and if I may make a suggestion, I would step the key up a few notches to give your voice some more driving power. And you do look like madonna. Just saying. That's a good thing in my book. :D

-Adam.
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I agree with the part about my voice. I hate to admit it, but I guess I'm a shy singer. Thank you for the constructive criticism, it's very well appreciated!!

Thanks to everyone for the critcism. Keep it comin', I could use the help.
 
alex0203 said:
I agree with the part about my voice. I hate to admit it, but I guess I'm a shy singer. Thank you for the constructive criticism, it's very well appreciated!!

Thanks to everyone for the critcism. Keep it comin', I could use the help.
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I think the vocals are almost there. Like somebody said, just need to fill up those lungs a bit more and belt it out.

For me the most distracting thing is the guitar track--I hear lots of percussive pick noise, almost like you were raking your pick right above a pickup. On the topic of pickups, it sounds a bit like a Strat with the pick-up selector in the #2 position, which happens to be a setting I've never cared much for.

If you want to keep the instrumentation this spare, have you considered an acoustic guitar instead? IMO, that would be a better fit for what you're doing.

If you want to keep it "plugged in", I don't know if you have a drummer but if not I'd encourage you to look at your options for programming some drums (drum machine, software, etc.). Not only does it allow you to fill out the song, but it will keep you on the rails and improve your smoothness of delivery.

Keep at it!
MattDee
 
nice start

I kinda liked the way the song started. It caught me off guard. It was low key and unassuming. The monotone vocal and out of tune "plucky" guitar gave it a "different" sound but I kept expecting it to get into focus and build in intensity and power.

Maybe a little work on the arrangement?
 
its sounds sorta like liz phair when she was starting out. same sort of guitar strumming too
 
being a singer myself, I'm finding it a bit hard to comment here....
Please don't be offended, but I think you should work on your voice some. It doesn't concern pitch problems in a line or two, it's the voice in itself that needs working on. You seem to have the ear but voice coaching would help you develop a good singing style. My advice is, don't try to run before you can walk and be honest to yourself.
 
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