Two Young Lads

[guitar zero]

Just finished mixing this. Any thoughts would be helpful.

 

[greyharmonix]

this sounds good. when he's "rapping" i think maybe a lo fi effect would work well and then once the chorus kicks in (and he starts singing) keep it as is. the whisper part i think is cool but maybe bring the levels down a bit to keep the rhythm of the song the focus of that portion. and maybe add an underlying lead guitar solo or lead something solo during the whisper part.

i'm not sure what the lyrics really refer to but there's something interesting about it. stones, cobble, rugby, lads, castle, dublin, gold i don't really know what Ireland looks like but this paints a good picture and music fits the vibe of what i imagine Ireland is like.

listened three times i liked it.

 

[guitar zero]

this sounds good. when he's "rapping" i think maybe a lo fi effect would work well and then once the chorus kicks in (and he starts singing) keep it as is. the whisper part i think is cool but maybe bring the levels down a bit to keep the rhythm of the song the focus of that portion. and maybe add an underlying lead guitar solo or lead something solo during the whisper part.

i'm not sure what the lyrics really refer to but there's something interesting about it. stones, cobble, rugby, lads, castle, dublin, gold i don't really know what Ireland looks like but this paints a good picture and music fits the vibe of what i imagine Ireland is like.

listened three times i liked it.

True, it's a song about two guys traveling around Ireland, getting lost, driving on the wrong side of the road on stone lined roads, etc. etc.
What kind of things do you do to a vocal track to make it low fi? Telephone, type EQ and added hiss? Not sure exactly what you're thinking.

 

[Jack Real]

Hi

I really enjoyed the song. Very original and well played.

Excellent work.

/Jack Real

 

[WhiteStrat]

Wow Zero--this is so cool! I love the texture that all the layers create. And the contrast between the staccato rap/talk vs. the sweet harmonies is perfect!

The mix is rich & full. While I agree with the comment about the rap coming down a bit, I'm not finding anything else wrong. Everything is holding its own in its own place--very well put together.

So tell us--what's you in this tune? Writing, singing, performing? Tracking & mixing? Or all of the above. Just a really cool tune and I'd love to hear more about it...

 

[guitar zero]

Thanks for the comments. My son did the vocals, acoustic guitar and electric guitar. I did the bass, banjo and ebow parts on the tele, as well as the mixing, editing. So the spoken word part is too loud you think?

 

[WhiteStrat]

Thanks for the comments. My son did the vocals, acoustic guitar and electric guitar. I did the bass, banjo and ebow parts on the tele, as well as the mixing, editing. So the spoken word part is too loud you think?

Yeah, I think it's a smidge loud. But the sung note at the end of each spoken passage sounds right. So if you bring the spoken part down, try to automate a nudge back up right into that last, sung word.

Conrats to you and your son. Excellent stuff!

 

[guitar zero]

Thanks Strat. I'll try your suggestions and re-post version 2 shortly.

 

[joeym]

Nice song, very Irish feel!
Recording sounds pretty good to me and your son's got a great voice.
Nice lyrics and harmonies. Only the whispered part sounds a bit too in front to me. This is class chart stuff!

Cheers
Joey

 

[ido1957]

The telephone idea sounds good. Bit of sibilance on the esses....I think White Strat's right about the rap part being a smidge loud. Fine song, mix is super close....

 

[guitar zero]

The telephone idea sounds good. Bit of sibilance on the esses....I think White Strat's right about the rap part being a smidge loud. Fine song, mix is super close....

Thanks for the input. I actually already ran the vocals through a de-esser. I suppose I could hit it again at another frequency. Thanks again.

 

[jamesduysen]

I like the song and how the chorus sounds with those harmonies.

I might bring the vox down a tad during the verse so it will sit a bit better.

great work!

-jD