Interesting beginning. Everything sounds a bit tooo brite like it's solid state amps recorded on early digital recording gear. I'm thinking some of the guitars could benefit by being run throug a tape-sim or something.
Good arrangement for metal, but the bass really needs to come up. I couldn't really detect anything lows until 2:00 and i'm wondering is it coming from keys?
Vocalist is doing a good job, good voice for the genre. Like the heavy change at 3:00 but again everything sounds top heavy. This mix would really sound much much "heavier" if you put more bass in it both in the kick and in the bass, find a way to put the "thump" into this cut and you'll be much more satisfied.
