Wrote this the other day..

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Let me know what you think.. I know the timing is a bit off, but I recorded it right after I wrote it, and I just set up the recording setup on my computer.. so Jim kind new to it.. Anyway let me know what you think of the song, and how the recording sounds (the anomalys in the background are the heaters in the apartment crackling =] allthough I cant seem to hear em while playing it back right now) .



Our Mistakes

Maybe I was too hard,
On the feelings, and the scars
Of a past, we once knew
And somehow, I blamed you

Come back to me, and I'll make our mistakes
You wont have to live, with the blame of this heart ache
Come back to me, and I'll make our mistakes...

And Maybe I was too Hard
On you, that night in the car
With mistakes forgivness should be made,
But a mans pride pushed you away

So Come back to me, and I'll make our mistakes
You wont have to live, with the blame of this heart ache
Come back to me, and I'll make our mistakes
You wont have to live, with the pain of this heart ache

Come back to me

And I feel its ok,
If I dont think of a way
To get me back, to that place.
The touch of your skin,
The sound of your voice,
The look of your smile on your face

So Come back to me, and I'll make our mistakes
You wont have to live, with the blame of this heart ache
Come back to me, and I'll make our mistakes
You wont have to live, with the pain of this heart ache
Come back to me, and I'll make our mistakes
You wont have to live, with the blame of this heart ache

Come back to me
Come back to me

-Josh
 
Slowjett said:
Let me know what you think.. I know the timing is a bit off, but I recorded it right after I wrote it, and I just set up the recording setup on my computer.. so Jim kind new to it.. Anyway let me know what you think of the song, and how the recording sounds (the anomalys in the background are the heaters in the apartment crackling =] allthough I cant seem to hear em while playing it back right now) .



Our Mistakes

Maybe I was too hard,
On the feelings, and the scars
Of a past, we once knew
And somehow, I blamed you

Come back to me, and I'll make our mistakes
You wont have to live, with the blame of this heart ache
Come back to me, and I'll make our mistakes...

And Maybe I was too Hard
On you, that night in the car
With mistakes forgivness should be made,
But a mans pride pushed you away

So Come back to me, and I'll make our mistakes
You wont have to live, with the blame of this heart ache
Come back to me, and I'll make our mistakes
You wont have to live, with the pain of this heart ache

Come back to me

And I feel its ok,
If I dont think of a way
To get me back, to that place.
The touch of your skin,
The sound of your voice,
The look of your smile on your face

So Come back to me, and I'll make our mistakes
You wont have to live, with the blame of this heart ache
Come back to me, and I'll make our mistakes
You wont have to live, with the pain of this heart ache
Come back to me, and I'll make our mistakes
You wont have to live, with the blame of this heart ache

Come back to me
Come back to me

-Josh


I liked the guitar and you have got a good voice. It is a good song but I couldn't help feeling I'd heard it before as in the lyrics are well written but maybe a tad cliched?

Nice song though :D :D :D :D
 
Not bad. Not bad at all.
This is a song it would be possible to produce something out of spending some time on it. Not groundbreaking new, but totally ok/fine.
Your voice are good. So is the recording quality. I would call it "Come back to me" though, due to the repetition of that phrase when singing it.
All and all a nice effort. A tad flat in the buildup though.

Keep on making music.
 
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