What the hell is this???

[RAMI]

80's rock? I hope not, but maybe.

Just a straight ahead rock song? I hope so.

I might re-do the vocals because I just got over a fever, but my voice might still be a little stuffed up.

As usual, I just finished tracking and then started mixing right away etc...never a good idea. I always do this and then realize, after getting a bunch of comments, that I should have waited before mixing and posting.

So any advice and opinions are always appreciated.

Thanx

PSYCHO-DELIC

 

[PDP]

The guitar solo has a 1980s ZZtop sound to it, but I like it. I like the Chorus and Bridge(s) but the Verses dont thrill me. Overall sounds great. Mix sounds real good to me. Enjoyed the listen.

 

[RAMI]

The guitar solo has a 1980s ZZtop sound to it, but I like it. I like the Chorus and Bridge(s) but the Verses dont thrill me. Overall sounds great. Mix sounds real good to me. Enjoyed the listen.

Thanx a lot PDP. My weakness is usually writing verses. I can come up with good hooks and changes, and then I find myself sort of resorting to "filler" for verses. Not deliberately,but that's how it often turns out. I guess it's better than writing good verses and shitty choruses, but still something I need to work on.

I really appreciate the comments, man. Thanx.

 

[Greg_L]

Sounds pretty good. I'd suggest bringing the side guitars way up. The middle raunch-o-rama guit is a little out of balance with the side rhythms. Like when the first verse starts, the middle guitar cuts out leaving the outboard guitars by themselves, and there's a noticeable drop in energy. Then the mid guit comes back in and the wide rhythms almost vanish. Snare could be louder too IMO. Kick and bass sound real good to me. Overall another good tune and good early mix.

 

[RAMI]

Sounds pretty good. I'd suggest bringing the side guitars way up. The middle raunch-o-rama guit is a little out of balance with the side rhythms. Like when the first verse starts, the middle guitar cuts out leaving the outboard guitars by themselves, and there's a noticeable drop in energy. Then the mid guit comes back in and the wide rhythms almost vanish. Snare could be louder too IMO. Kick and bass sound real good to me. Overall another good tune and good early mix.

Thanx Gregster. Doing all that right now. I got no problem with making the snare louder. I think I get paranoid about mixing like a drummer, so I tend to maybe be too conservative with the drums, thinking that if they sound good to me, they must be too loud. I agree with the rythm guits being too low. I'm adjusting all that right now.

Mix #2 coming soon.

 

[PDP]

. My weakness is usually writing verses. .

Lol, I can relate, I dont know how rappers can write so many freakin words, most of it is crap, but sometimes theres some interesting stuff and its like 15 times the words you need for a pop tune.

 

[Greg_L]

Thanx Gregster. Doing all that right now. I got no problem with making the snare louder. I think I get paranoid about mixing like a drummer, so I tend to maybe be too conservative with the drums, thinking that if they sound good to me, they must be too loud. I agree with the rythm guits being too low. I'm adjusting all that right now.

Mix #2 coming soon.

Drummers make the best mixes. It's a proven fact. We don't neglect the drums like other people do. Your snare was in a good spot, it's just that I think there was troom for more of it.

 

[heatmiser]

I think your mix sounds really good already, although between you, Greg and others, I'm sure you'll find things to tweak to bring it together even more.

As far as dating it, definitely not '80's, no (whew!). Drums sound '90's ish to me - tight and punchy. Guitars sound '70's ish. Those together make a pretty good combo. I thought the performance all around was tight. Background vocals crisp and in perfect synch as always from you.

For me, the lyrics were a bit off-putting though just 'cause of all of the overt references to other tunes and stuff, but I myself am no lyricist, and I don't mean to be negative - just my initial impression. Really well put together though rami.

 

[RAMI]

I think your mix sounds really good already, although between you, Greg and others, I'm sure you'll find things to tweak to bring it together even more.

As far as dating it, definitely not '80's, no (whew!). Drums sound '90's ish to me - tight and punchy. Guitars sound '70's ish. Those together make a pretty good combo. I thought the performance all around was tight. Background vocals crisp and in perfect synch as always from you.

Thanx a lot Heat. All that is a huge relief. The last thing I want to be reminded of, or remind anyone else of is the 80's. As for the rest, thank you, I really appreciate all that.

For me, the lyrics were a bit off-putting though just 'cause of all of the overt references to other tunes and stuff, but I myself am no lyricist, and I don't mean to be negative - just my initial impression.

No offense taken. I realize the lyrics could go either way as far as either being appealing, or just being un-original. I actually do the "reference" thing often in my tunes, but I really piled it on in this one. Like I was saying in my earlier post, my verses tend to get reduced to "filler" sometimes, and with this tune, I was dry as far as lyrical ideas go, so I just went the "rip-off" route.

Thanx a lot for the comments, brother.

 

[ido1957]

Cool tune Rami, love the grit on the guitar. Vocals seemed a touch loud in the mix but the story within the lyrics shone thru. The solo is outstanding! Great job!

 

[RAMI]

Cool tune Rami, love the grit on the guitar. Vocals seemed a touch loud in the mix but the story within the lyrics shone thru. The solo is outstanding! Great job!

Thanx a lot Ido. Vocals too loud, eh? I usually have the opposite problem. I'll listen again later with fresh ears once I wake up and see if I need them to come down. Thanx man.

 

[hppnq]

Very good! I like the verses. I couldn't help thinking it might have been an idea to go slightly more with something like "I want you (She's so heavy)" in the verses: let the guitar play along with the melody instead of (just) the riffs. Probably a stupid idea. :-D Anyway, great performance!

 

[RAMI]

Very good! I like the verses. I couldn't help thinking it might have been an idea to go slightly more with something like "I want you (She's so heavy)" in the verses: let the guitar play along with the melody instead of (just) the riffs. Probably a stupid idea. :-D Anyway, great performance!

Not a stupid idea at all. I think the verses might be a little under-developped, and I'm definitely going to try something along the lines of your idea. You might have something there.

Thanx a lot for the listen and suggestion.

 

[Manslick]

This sounds fine to me man. Your songs are consistent in tone which I personally find impossible to achieve. Mainly because I hate being a OMB.

I love the double track gang vox during the chorus and the nod to Twist and Shout at 203 with a punk application. That is very cool right there.

Butterflies and zebras +1

I think the verses are just right, making me think did he just say Yazgurs? But - kiss an enemy? I’m on the fence with that one.

 

[VomitHatSteve]

I think the melody in the verses are good. The one issue that I noticed with them (and it's a pretty subtle one) is that there isn't a lot of contrast between the verse and chorus as far as energy goes. I think a lot of that is the drums. The patterns on the verse and chorus are really similar, but I less high hat on the verse and more of everything on the chorus would help.

I really like the gang vocals.

 

[RAMI]

This sounds fine to me man. Your songs are consistent in tone which I personally find impossible to achieve. Mainly because I hate being a OMB.

I love the double track gang vox during the chorus and the nod to Twist and Shout at 203 with a punk application. That is very cool right there.

Butterflies and zebras +1

I think the verses are just right, making me think did he just say Yazgurs? But - kiss an enemy? I’m on the fence with that one.

Thanx Manslick. OMB??? I have no idea what that is. I Goggled it and got a bunch of things that probably aren't what you meant.

Yes, I said "Yasgur's farm" , where Woodstock took place.

"Kiss an enemy"....Meh, whatever. I was just rying to finish writing this thing.

Thanx dude.

 

[RAMI]

I think the melody in the verses are good. The one issue that I noticed with them (and it's a pretty subtle one) is that there isn't a lot of contrast between the verse and chorus as far as energy goes. I think a lot of that is the drums. The patterns on the verse and chorus are really similar, but I less high hat on the verse and more of everything on the chorus would help.

I really like the gang vocals.

Thanx Vom.

I don't really feel it necessary to make verses and choruses vary all the time. Many songs have pretty much the same verse and chorus musically, with the only difference being the melody...but I hear what you're saying. I played a closed hi-hat in the verses, and an open hi-hat in the choruses. Don't really think it needed more than that.

Thanx for the listen, brother.

 

[Nakatira]

Cool tune Rami.
I does not sound 80 to me either , it sounds like you, as you defenitly have got your own sound bro.
I really like the sound of the guitars and the vocals.
My only nits, and this might be my listening system, or just my hearing ; The hi-hat sounds a bit weird (phasey or something), specially in the beginning and the snare is wee bit thin.

 

[RAMI]

Cool tune Rami.
I does not sound 80 to me either , it sounds like you, as you defenitly have got your own sound bro.
I really like the sound of the guitars and the vocals.
My only nits, and this might be my listening system, or just my hearing ; The hi-hat sounds a bit weird (phasey or something), specially in the beginning and the snare is wee bit thin.

Thanx Nak. Nah, there's no phasing on the hats. In the intro, I'm just playing them wide open and really hard.

Thin snare is a matter of taste, I guess. I love my snare sound, but that's a personal taste thing.

 

[Manslick]

Thanx Manslick. OMB??? I have no idea what that is. I Goggled it and got a bunch of things that probably aren't what you meant.

Yes, I said "Yasgur's farm" , where Woodstock took place.

"Kiss an enemy"....Meh, whatever. I was just rying to finish writing this thing.

Thanx dude.

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