Sounds good, Romi. But as with other songs, timing is the biggest problem. It doesn't sound like you have a sense of the timing or time signature of the song. This is 6/8 (or 12/8).In other words, it should be all "1,2,3,1,2,3....etc...." There are times when that's what you're doing, and other times where it just falls apart timing-wise. Sounds great other than that.