The Thaw

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I am working on a recording project where I have put three Henry David Thoreau poems to music as part of a four song EP.

This is the first of the lot, called "The Thaw."

This song follows the poem to the letter.

In the others I took more liberties and added some lyrics as well.

Thoughts and critiques are appreciated and welcomed.


 
Song sounds alright - lead vox needs more confidence - and while the track is not muted per se - something seems to be masking it a bit - sounds
to me like you trimmed the treble a bit.
 
Papanate said:
Song sounds alright - lead vox needs more confidence - and while the track is not muted per se - something seems to be masking it a bit - sounds
to me like you trimmed the treble a bit.
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Thanks for the input.

I was considering re-tracking the lead vocal, seems you agree :)

I will also tinker with adding some top end.
 
My two cent. I listened on mediocre speakers, but I have found for general listening, if it sounds good on these ...

I liked everything, I thought the vocals sounded "uncertain", not natural. I think if you kept everything like you have it, record the vocals with a few ore takes (for practice/comfort) and push them a tad higher (leave everything else the same), I think you will have a very good recording.

Hope it this helps.
 
I liked the music. I thought the whole song was nice.

It starts a little abruptly.

The doubled acoustic guitars are very thin and right in the same frequency range as the vocal. The vocal needs to win. I'd try to retrack the guitars and try to get a guitar sound that's more prominent in the low-mid range.

The vocal is a little tentative and pitchy in spots. A double tracked vocal would sound great on a song like this. The harmony vocals are nice.

I'd like a little more warmth in the bass. And/or a little less low end.

Drums sounded OK to me. The kick is getting covered by the bass.
 
TripleM said:
I liked the music. I thought the whole song was nice.

It starts a little abruptly.

The doubled acoustic guitars are very thin and right in the same frequency range as the vocal. The vocal needs to win. I'd try to retrack the guitars and try to get a guitar sound that's more prominent in the low-mid range.

The vocal is a little tentative and pitchy in spots. A double tracked vocal would sound great on a song like this. The harmony vocals are nice.

I'd like a little more warmth in the bass. And/or a little less low end.

Drums sounded OK to me. The kick is getting covered by the bass.
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Thanks for the listen and input.

Yeah, vocals are getting redone. Might try the double tracked method.

I think I eq'd the acoustics pretty bright. I will look at adjusting that.

I had another bass drum that I found a bit boomy, maybe I went too far the other way.
 
I like the music too, works well.

Mix wise, along with what's already been said, my overriding thought is that it's pretty muddy and just clearing it up will take the mix a long way.

The start sounds good to me as is, I wouldn't change it.

There's a pretty decent end in sight for this and I look forward to hearing it again when it's done.
 
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I did not focus too much on the instruments.
As is it's like a play.
Well pronunciated.



The Thaw
Henry David Thoreau


I saw the civil sun drying earth’s tears
Her tears of joy that only faster flowed,
Fain would I stretch me by the highway side,
To thaw and trickle with the melting snow,
That mingled soul and body with the tide,
I too may through the pores of nature flow.
But I alas nor tinkle can nor fume,
One jot to forward the great work of Time,
‘Tis mine to hearken while these ply the loom,
So shall my silence with their music chime.
 
I enjoyed the listen. I really liked the backing vocals - they sounded great. As for the lead vocal, I know what the others mean, however, it bothered me less the more I listened. I just kind of thought, "Oh ... well that just must be his voice" and relaxed into it. Once I did that, I enjoyed it more. The vocals reminded me a bit of Bread or America, which isn't a bad thing at all.

I do agree with the mix comments above in general and the abrupt start.

Sounds like a fun project - nicely done, and thanks for sharing! ?
 
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