the strange birth of a song....

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This is a song I started working on a few days ago. It came about when I played this one chord. That chord reminded me of that one Nirvana song. I cant remember the name but I think it was acoustic mostly. (It's OK to eat fish, cause they don't have any feet.... or whatever) So that got me to playing around and suddenly I had written almost an entire song just by jamming for about 15 minutes. (altough once you hear it you'd never know I even ever listened to nirvana!) It's been about two years since I was able to write that way. Anyway, I spent the shortest amount of time to date recording this one, and there's still some mistakes to fix, but I had so much FUN with it I just wanted someone else to hear it. So here's a rough first draft.
disclaimer.....It's a little long and takes a bit to get into the meat of the song. Also, no vocals of course, due to my lack of vocal chords;) song2
http://www.nowhereradio.com/artists/album.php?aid=2006&alid=-1
 
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BUSTER!!!!!!!!! this is an absolute GEM!!!!!!!!! and it's rough?!!

WOW!!!!!! i am diggin it!!!!!!! no mix comment's, just wanted to drop a line.........this is really good stuff!!!! You have to add vocal's, there are so many cool melodies that could be sang over this music!!!!!!! and it would sound great!!!!! get to work!!!!!! i need a full version of this song, but quick!!!!!!!!!!!!:D Really dig that snare sound!!!

I'll be waiting, and in the mean time, i guess this will have to do!


trebly bass is cool, too!!!!! I like it!!!:D seriously!!!!

Thank's for the tune, mbuster!!!!

Peace

Rick
 
Wow, thanks, man. Unfortunately the few times I've tried to sing over any of my stuff it ruined anything it had going for it in the first place. I know a couple guys though.........
Yeah it's still rough though. That solo was just a noodle, and must be redone. there's some bits I really don't like. As for the bass, I've been trying to get a little more creative with my bass sound. I really wanted it to be a part of the song instead of hiding behind the guitars. I'll get there. Thanks for the listen!
 
Nice guitar work in there. The begining reminded me of some recent Jeff Beck stuff.

I share the feeling about making the bass "part of the song instead of hiding behind the guitars" - you did a good job.
 
datsa goot bass sound. you could fatten it and turn it up a lil and let dance in and around the drums a lil more. The guitar story was real cool and phat. The drums were strong like railroad ties, more kick. Nice beginning.
 
Hey this is a great sound. I agree, this is like a fertile field just waiting for vox to grow.

What you have so far is totally radio worthy imo.
 
Nice stuff Mark. I thought the intro could be tightened up, but I like the rest of it. Flows very well. Let me know if you can't find a singer.

By the way, I took that vocal track for "work a little harder" down. Guessing you moved on.
 
Toki: Thanks for the listen, the relationship between the bass, kick, and the rest of the song is one of the hardest parts for me to get to translate to other systems. Listening in my car kind of pointed that out to me.

Khompewter: I don't know if it's a fertile field or not, but my particular dogshit vocals do not the geatest of fertilizers make!:D

Tom: Thanks for the praise. That intro is a bit of a sore spot for me. I've already changed it a bit and I like it a bit better now. A bit. Sorry about "work a little harder" I kind of burned myself out on it. Me and ChrisHarris did some cool stuff with it, but never finished and now he's contemplating quitting music but he hasn't gone public with his decision yet. There's still time to save him. Hope it's nothing to do with my song. Anyway, I had to do something new because I had been fooling with that song for way too long.Hope it's OK.

Everybody: Hopefully the new version will be done soon, but I've got work to do and need all the help I can get! Keep em coming, please.
 
mbuster said:
Tom: Thanks for the praise. That intro is a bit of a sore spot for me. I've already changed it a bit and I like it a bit better now. A bit. Sorry about "work a little harder" I kind of burned myself out on it. Me and ChrisHarris did some cool stuff with it, but never finished and now he's contemplating quitting music but he hasn't gone public with his decision yet. There's still time to save him. Hope it's nothing to do with my song. Anyway, I had to do something new because I had been fooling with that song for way too long.Hope it's OK.
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Quite!
 
oh my

found myself tapping along to it. probably the best praise i could
give. very very nice. don't like the intro though:)

good job!
 
Shorten or lose the intro for sure. The overall structure of the song is very good. Has a good pop/rock feel to it, screams for vocals as you know. Keep developing this one, it should have some serious mass appeal. Excellent use of ears for song structure, catchable chords, good dynamics. My only advice would be to cut it down to under 4 minutes. Excellent work!
 
I disagree with almost everyone about the intro. I'm going to say this without trying to offend anyone, but I think we should be wary of advice that tries to make your music conform to something that sounds more pallatable or radio-friendly. I personally like the unexpected touches which set apart a standard genre song from others like it. In this case, I think the intro is a nice original touch not usually heard in a tune like this. We don't, or shouldn't make music to sound like everyone else! Someone might make a commercial argument for trimming the intro but I think this is dubious as well. People often underestimate what others are willing to hear. In this case, a few seconds of rhythm pattern is intriguing, and not taxing anyone's patience.
 
"Something in the Way"

And I'll try to listen to the tune when I get home tonite.
 
After you listen to it tell me if you can figure out how I got from "something in the way" to this thing.
 
It's bizarre how those things happen aint it. Cool tune. Turn that bass up. And if you could get some more thump in the kick drum I think that would help nicely. The guitars sound nice. But yeah, if you could find a singer person type thing I think this could be a damn nice song.
 
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