Alright fella, I'll give it a listen if only to stop you bumping it again
I'm guessing you're a pretty big Clouddead fan huh? I'm struggling to know what to say in terms of feedback, particularly as it's unfinished. There's some potentially interesting stuff on here, I quite like the wonky synths - but the beat sounds too much like a keyboard demo in it's present form, for me at least.
The vocals you've done so far sound ok if it's a Clouddead-y type sound you're going for, but I think the meter and the lyrics are a little clumsy at times. ie. forcing some of the lyrics into the rhythm, and I'm not too sure about lines like "laugh until I piss myself" which are just plain ugly.