"The Passing"

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I've got one more remix for yas. This one is pretty synth-heavy and I'd mostly like to know how the frequencies and levels are on your speakers. I'm questioning the low end right now mostly.

I wrote this one last fall. It was my immediate way of dealing with 9-11, having spent much time in those two beautiful towers myself. (Sam, did you ever get the chance to walk the catwalk?)

I completely redid the drums and remixed everything. And it seems to be cleaner now. But is it clean and dynamic enough do y'all think?

Thanks a bunch,
Tom

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Very slick. The intro was too cool.
The only detracter I heard was when you came up into the chorus' I thought the vocal was slightly flat.
This a very haunting, cool song.:cool:
 
You know, I think you're right. I'm gonna redo that. Wasn't sure if I was just hearing things. Thanks, TR.
 
Thanks for pointing that out TR. The fix is uploading now.
 
Great Tune!

Wow! I really liked your use of Indian Instruments on this one.

Here is my only feedback:
I thought when the drums kicked in, they could have been a bit louder in the mix. They are kind of lost. I also thought the vocals could have come up a bit on the quiet parts, just to give them a bit more umph! (if that is a word) I couldn't really make out the lyrics sometimes. Other than those few things, the levels sounded good on my machine.

The overall feel of the song is good and strong, and it does convey a mood of loss and fits the subject well. It is very deep!

This is a pretty hard subject to write about, and you being so close to it and all I'm sure it was probably hard to sit down and write. I think you did a great job and made a great recording. I think a little more mixing and it will be perfect!
 
Thanks boybrj. You were very right. Boosted them.

PS. I know people who were certainly much closer to it than myself. Compared to them, I had an easy day.
 
sounds good.....low end fine on my JBL 4311's and Urie 813's....

All levels, mixwise seem pretty decent too. The low-ish vocals (in volume) are fine with me too.

only comments/suggestions might be to take Jew harp sound...can't think of the instrument now....but lower that once you're more into the song. It carries all the way thru, and as neat as it is, you don't need the drone all the way thru that loud. Also...there were some loud snare hits...the first time they come in...maybe a little loud, and the snare is a little tinny for me.

very creative. some fine music..
 
Take what I say with a grain of salt - I'm an old guy with poor hearing and a fried mind, and I'm listening thru headphones.

Very nice - I myself like the droning thru the whole song. My only problem is the vocals get lost for me sometimes, and I think being able to understand them is important to the song. Maybe sometimes it's the low gain, sometimes the effects sort of take over, though I like the effects.

I really like the flute-like turnaround mid-song.
Haunting.
 
Dug it !!!

the only input I can give you is the bottom end is a little muddy to me. I agree with the comments on the vocals.

I really like the song and I want your kick drum! gimme, and the low tom Gimme gimme gimme. I like that triangle-bell sound you used.

the whole feel of the song is nice, I would change the genre to alternative though.

Torp
 
yeah, this song definitely sucks you right in. Love it, but the vocal might have a bit too much dynamic, but, that's just my taste.
Real cool tune.

AL
 
Thanks for the remarks guys. I appreciate it.

Mixmakr, if you have a moment would you please have another listen. I took both of your suggestions and they worked wonders. Lowering that mystery instrument really freed up a lot of space, particularly for the vox. I also boosted some lows on that snare. Seems to have helped a bit.
I'm asking you particualrly cuz I know how well you work in large reverb environments. "Spanish Nights" comes quickly to mind. :cool:

Thanks again all,
Tom
 
I grew up in the NY area and still have family there-I was on the catwalk of the towers about a yr before 9/11- An absolutely majestic experience......
Anyway I like the tune-The vocal seemed slightly out of tune during the chorus'(s)-maybe it was intentional? This one didnt grab me the way some of your other tunes have-maybe its just personal preference.....Thanks for sharing the tune anyway. I really like your guitar playing.....
 
unfortunately, I didnt.. as a matter of fact, I was only in the towers once in my whole life...when I was 7...
I live about an hour away from the city, and on 9-11 that didnt seem far away at all, after I watched the second plane hit on T.V...... I am still worried. It sometimes scares me to know there is no way off Long Island in an emergency.

Anyway, I'll check out the tune later because my ears are fried right now...

later
sam
 
I know what you mean. I lived in Long Beach (South Shore) for about 6 months. I had a hard enough time just getting out of town.
 
I might agree that the vox could have a more defined home but, this does not take away from your vision and the completion thereof. Are you one of those midi dudes that can make anything happen? I'm covetous, not of your creativity but, of your actuality. I think I'll go lower my head and raise my personnal expectations.

i guess i liked it.


Theron.
 
ooohhh...nice..
sounds like you turned up the vocals a bit too...which is good.

the drums are back there...but play a good supporting role. I think you're there, guy....
very nice.....(even with the reverb cranked in spots!!)

I have no valid complaints with this mix.

Now...I'm going to get really picky.....and I mean really picky....
on your fade out note(which is more or less a reverb tail)...the hiss cuts off into silence abruptly.. either some hiss reduction in that spot only, or a more linear fade of the reverb tail into complete silence.
 
Cool song!

I hear the same triton presets I have in there :)

Nice creative piece of work.

You sound like you might be a Staley alice in chains fan. same vocal character

I listened to you other song AFTC.. the beginning gave me thoughts of JMorrison... Great work ... keep at it!
 
Thanks all.

Theron- I'm not a big "midi" fan to be frank. I can't stand what I've heard for midi sounds. I've only experimented with it in the last month so I'm not the best judge on that. Maybe I just don't have the patience for midi editing, but mostly I just enjoy playing out the parts myself. But it's great for sequencing drums on the Korg in my apartment! :-)

Mix- You are a huge help!

JMarcomb- This was the the second song I did when I first got a keyboard (Triton). It's such a great composition tool, especially when you need a break from the "rock band" thing.

Thanks again guys.
 
completely cool..

Everything sounds really good to me... These new versions of your tunes really sound great..

It probably could be argued that there is a little offness in the vocals of the chorus, but you can tell you were feeling it, so it might add to the coolness for some...


I totally dig the beginning... I also love the mood, although I know it's a somber one.. I cant really make out the lyrics, but it doesnt matter too much because it's a mood song..

The mix sounds great to me..


all around great stuff...


later
sam
 
OK OK! For some reason I can never mix this where the lyrics are understood and still maintain the mood. So here they are, because I think most of us can probably relate to them...

The Passing

Turning the channels today
Smoking the reasons away
Said they've already a name
So soon, someone to blame

Let's keep him alive for our stones

Broader our crying abounds
Louder their laughter resounds
Now our towers have burned
Some say we'll never return to normal

We're passing through slowly
Your surprise seems so strange
Your wars are unholy, unholy and you should change.

Moving in waves tonight
Crossing the ocean to fight
To deliver messages of might
Splashes, flashes of light.

Keep him alive for our stones.

Never a day will pass we don't remember this, you assholes.


(And that chorus note may in fact be off. Maybe I'll fix it on a Saturday afternoon. I'm always afraid of pissing off the neighbors when I sing. LOL)

Anyway, thanks for the feedback all. HomeRecer's rule! One day we'll have our own subculture on HomeRecer Island...
 
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