The latest: wha'cha think?

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Chris Shaeffer

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Howdy,

Well, lotsa stuff to write about these days and this is the latest creation. I'm working on recording it this week- its mostly planned out in my head and just need to go do it.

I like these lyrics because I think they tell a story without coming right out and saying it. At least they are written around a story that I hope comes through. :)

This is *way* less vauge than I usually am. :D

Does it work for you?

Thanks,
Chris

(Untitled, as yet.)

(Intro)
There is a secret: you’ll find
You can get used to anything in time
Even tell yourself that night is day
If you tell yourself that its OK.

Chorus
What’s another lonely night among many?
Another little lie to keep the peace?
What’s another shadow in the darkness?
Another love story without me?

(Verse)
We planned our garden out with no thought at all
Scattered seeds to the wind and dreamed about the Fall
When a bountiful harvest would take us far beyond our fear.

We let our garden grow with no help at all
We played on the mountaintops while our weeds were growing tall
And lied about how beautiful our garden looks from here.

(Chorus)
But what’s another lonely night among many?
Another little lie to keep the peace?
What’s another shadow in the darkness?
Another love story without me?

(Verse)
I can still hear you now
Talking on the phone
As I lay there late at night
Trying not to feel alone
And thinking maybe the next day I would tell you how I feel.

I see so clearly now that those days are gone
You felt the same way
And I just missed it all along
Though our lies were silent, the silence was still real.

(Chorus)
But what’s another lonely night among many?
Another little lie to keep the peace?
What’s another shadow in the darkness?
Another love story without me?
 
Hey Chris,Looks good to me..Ya Woman suck.LOL
Love the intro! Very strong..I always edit out things that are overstatein' and words that repeat when they aren't nessesary..
Things like...
Among Many..
Bountiful ? do you need that word..seems like three exta sylibles thats a little on the wordy side...
Third "We"..You use "we" in the line before also in the beginin' of that verse..
Thinking {maybe} the next day I'd tell you how I feel..Kinda how you might say the words in conversation..Could be wrong!
Though your lies were silent,Its that silence I feel.She lied tell it like it is and how it effects you..
Title..Humm how about "Little Lies"
Anyways, good work on this song! cool imagery, honest emotion..It was a pleasure to read...


Don
 
Excellent Chris.
Vauge, yeah, but the message still comes through.

Can't wait to hear it.
 
Don: Good points... I looked hard at those parts of the lyrics. The excessive "we's" looked a little ugly on paper and I tried to work around them a bit. Its a "we" song, anyway, so it fits with what I'm trying to say.

The "among many" line was actually the first line I wrote for the song. Its interesting that you should pick that one out. :) The "among" many is a reference back to the intro - "you can get used to anything in time."

Yup- bountiful is a big word, but it fits the sentiment I'm trying to build- it also echos the word "beautiful" that's the same place in the next verse. I guess that's more word play than lyrical, but I think it fits in. We'll see when you hear it. I hope it works.

And thanks for the title! It is officially now "Little Lies" Perfect!

badgas: Workin' as fast as I can!. I actually have my scratch recording done, set to loop, and playing back while I clean the house. Workin' on the harmonies while I'm workin' on the house.

Back to my organizing! (I have to fit all my crap into a jeep and a u-haul - including a motorcycle- in 2 months. No time like the present...)

Thanks guys!

Take care,
Chris
 
Ok, I got a rough draft up at nowhere. Its pretty darn rough- with a few hack edits to cover up glaring performance problems and cut/pasted backing vox. It gives you the sense of the song, though. I think the rough spots in the lyrics blend well with the music (I hope.)

http://www.nowhereradio.com/artists/album.php?aid=1247&alid=-1

"Little Lies" (Thanks again, Don!)

I've been bouncing back and forth between some orchestration ideas during the chorus, maybe some interesting backing vocals- and leaving it bare like this and just getting a *really* clean recording of the guitars and vocals. I'm been doing a lot of thick vocal stuff recently- maybe this one should be more pared down and honest?

That's my feeling at any rate. I'm not even sure I'm going to add a bass line. I'm going to see if I can get a nice full bottom end out of the steel string. We'll see...

Take care,
Chris
 
I like your song, but Christine McVie has used that title already.

Little Lies, Fleetwood Mac, Tango in the Night album 1987.

Not to say you couldn't use it, but I feel funny using another artists title if I know they used it.

Your song put pictures in my head of what you're trying to convey. That's a good sign of a good song.
 
Hey, Sennheiser.

Coolness! That's really neat that the song put pictures in your head! Thanks for saying that. :) That does indeed tell me that its working. And thanks for the heads up on the Fleetwood Mac title. I don't take myself so seriously that I feel too motivated to change it, but...now I have that song stuck in my head! :p

Take care,
Chris
 
"Tell me lies, tell me sweet little lies......"

"Tell me lies."

"Oh, no no you can't disguise...."

"Tell me lies."

Kind of a catchy tune. She was always the upbeat one of the Mac.

Her birthday was a couple of days ago. Hard to believe she's 59.

Damn near old enough to be my Mom.
 
Damn Chris.
That's nice.
I agree with the images in the mind.
A nice, very nice song.
 
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