Didnt hear the first version, but sounds quite good. The kick drum is muffled, there isnt enough punch or click. I am liking the snare sound although too quiet in the mix.
Cymbals sound nice apart from the china. But thats because i dont like chinas.
Bass tone is cool. Maybe try compressing the lo a wee bit at mastering?
Nice chunky guitars. Please tell me you used a real amp and not a software programme.
Vocals sound fine. Clear and not overpowering but still easily distinguishable.
Good stuff overall Giraffe. Wish i could get guitar tone like that.