CrowsofFritz
Flamingo!
I haven't done a song in a long while. Here's one I wrote and recorded in a couple hours. It's as raw as a just-hunted venison. Let me know what you think!
mjbphotos
Moderator
The bass guitar is very muffled. The precussion (hitting the guitar?) is really 'in front' compared to everything else, maybe some EQ/compression or reverb on it would make it sit better. Song-wise, I'd like to hear some kind of change in the guitar's rhythm - the strum is exactly the same throughout the song, never any variation.
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CrowsofFritz
Flamingo!
Pretty much exactly what I thought when posting this sans the rhythm, though now that you said it, I hear it completely. It may work for the usual two minute songs I do, but this one is over four! 
Thanks for listening!
Thanks for listening!
Schwarzenyaeger
Formerly "Dog-In-Door"
The guitar sounds very brittle. I can really hear the pick stroking the strings. It coud use more warmth.
The very first harmony is very off tune. Most of them are a bit off. The "meeeeee" parts are very nasally. Occasionally there was a nice one.
Bass is muddy. Try some mid range boost to add definition.
The very first harmony is very off tune. Most of them are a bit off. The "meeeeee" parts are very nasally. Occasionally there was a nice one.
Bass is muddy. Try some mid range boost to add definition.
CrowsofFritz
Flamingo!
Thanks for listening, man!
I don't intend to do anything to the mix as I'll probably re-record everything, the main reason being is that I don't think this song is finished. It's too damn long. I can handle four minute songs when they're bands, but I like to make 2 min stuff when I'm just doing me stuff.
I don't intend to do anything to the mix as I'll probably re-record everything, the main reason being is that I don't think this song is finished. It's too damn long. I can handle four minute songs when they're bands, but I like to make 2 min stuff when I'm just doing me stuff.
rayc
retroreprobate
the seeds of something good. I think you're right to redo it with time and reflection.
CrowsofFritz
Flamingo!
Thanks! Literally wrote this in maybe two hours. I suppose I should have posted this in the Composition forum. I just wanted to know if I was heading in a good direction. Thanks for letting me know!
dobro
Well-known member
The main vocal pokes out too much in places, like at 1.37. Level automation and compressor.
The percussion: redo it, cuz it's got timing issues.
I mean, you could cut and paste bits to make it work, but it's such a simple part that the easiest and most fun thing would be to do it again.
This one's got a lo-fi sound, which I like. But if you do it again, think more about arrangement - either make it shorter, or make it more interesting with the addition of some different elements.
Nice tune.
The percussion: redo it, cuz it's got timing issues.
I mean, you could cut and paste bits to make it work, but it's such a simple part that the easiest and most fun thing would be to do it again.This one's got a lo-fi sound, which I like. But if you do it again, think more about arrangement - either make it shorter, or make it more interesting with the addition of some different elements.
Nice tune.
CrowsofFritz
Flamingo!
The main vocal pokes out too much in places, like at 1.37. Level automation and compressor.
The percussion: redo it, cuz it's got timing issues.
This one's got a lo-fi sound, which I like. But if you do it again, think more about arrangement - either make it shorter, or make it more interesting with the addition of some different elements.
Nice tune.
Definitely. I'll probably go the make it shorter route. Maybe add some electric geetur in there. Thanks for listening!