Take yourself a listen:

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I listened to track 13 as the link to track 4 didn't seem to be working.

The instruments sound pretty good.

I have a few problems with the vocals:
1. They seem to lack feeling - I've found its hard to sing in the studio the same way as on stage!
2. They seem too slow (like if the whole song was sped up it might sound better - or if more words were fit into a shorter time). I guess thats more of an issue for the songwriting forum - and you weent asking for a songwriting critique were you?!
3. Vocals at :17 sound a little weird I think it's a "p" - also the reverb may be a little weird right after that.
4. I do dig it when there are two voices. That sounds badass.

Listening to the song a few more times, I have less of an issue with number 2 - but I still thing the songs sounds a little too slow in general.

Great tune otherwise, I dig it! When will I see the album on the shelves at media play?




I also like the song in general.
 
I checked out track #4, i tried #13 but i got a file not found.

There seems to be a bit of top end sizzle to the track, probably in the guitars. It also seems more noticeable on the left hand side are the guits panned to the left?

Ok, here's some writing thoughts I had. Most of the rhythm tracks guitar and bass seem to be doubling each other a bit too much for my taste. Perhaps have the bass go off onto it's own themes on occassion. The the down picked eight notes have been propelling the song along the entire time, when it comes to the end to have the guitarist lay down the lead, perhaps get him/her to move onto a rhythmic patter that is countered to the eighth notes. I think this might help the band move away from sounding like traditional metal, unless that is what you what you are definitely trying to shoot for.

Good production, overall good job.
 
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