Sorjourn - Indie poprock melody

[Ashway]

Sojourn by The Source | Free Listening on SoundCloud

Been working on this for a few days. I think it’s missing something. There’s a part without melody, but except that there’s something odd going on soundwise.

 

[VomitHatSteve]

Is the timing correct on the piano? It sounds like it's supposed to be the 1+2+3+4+ pattern, but it's not quite landing at the right time. (alternatively, is something else out of time?)

 

[Ashway]

Thats a good question, I will have to check it out, thanks for the input

 

[mark skinner]

First off , Very cool song . Really like the feel . I think the "higher" instruments are the main culprits for the timing issues. Sounds to me like the keys and high guitar that come in at the intro need aligning... mark