Hello!
I just finished a new, little acoustic-track and I would like to know what you guys think of it. Being a student I don´t have any money for great equipment, so the overall sound-quality might not be too great. There is one problem with one particular line of the song...I am singing "If you reject me I had to earn grammys" which is probably wrong, isn´t it...do I need to replace it with a simple "have"? And please tell me what you think about the songwriting as well.
~~~ ZILLE - WRITER-STRIKE OF MY HEART ~~~
I love to feel helpless and stranded and bruised
It gives me the kick that I need
As an artist it is more productive to be
A whiny bitch than at ease
So do not fall in love with me
Don´t you dare it would tear me apart
I would squeal with glee and this joy would cause
The writer-strike of my heart
For you to fall in love with me
Is one of my worst fears
You might as well wreck my guitar
And kill off my musical career
If you don´t reject me I had to earn Grammys
With music as heartfelt as Lemmys
So do not fall in love with me
Don´t you dare it would tear me apart
I would squeal with glee and this joy would cause
The writer-strike of my heart
Thanks for listening!
Daniel
I just finished a new, little acoustic-track and I would like to know what you guys think of it. Being a student I don´t have any money for great equipment, so the overall sound-quality might not be too great. There is one problem with one particular line of the song...I am singing "If you reject me I had to earn grammys" which is probably wrong, isn´t it...do I need to replace it with a simple "have"? And please tell me what you think about the songwriting as well.
~~~ ZILLE - WRITER-STRIKE OF MY HEART ~~~
I love to feel helpless and stranded and bruised
It gives me the kick that I need
As an artist it is more productive to be
A whiny bitch than at ease
So do not fall in love with me
Don´t you dare it would tear me apart
I would squeal with glee and this joy would cause
The writer-strike of my heart
For you to fall in love with me
Is one of my worst fears
You might as well wreck my guitar
And kill off my musical career
If you don´t reject me I had to earn Grammys
With music as heartfelt as Lemmys
So do not fall in love with me
Don´t you dare it would tear me apart
I would squeal with glee and this joy would cause
The writer-strike of my heart
Thanks for listening!
Daniel