song i wrote

[kylosius]

i wanna know what you think mainly about the lyrics. and then musicianship (which i know is still weak as this is only a demo), and then if you feel like, recording and mixing help.

if you have real jukebox you can get my info on this song. including lyrics.

 

[kylosius]

well i guess none of you are interested. i just wanted an opinion on the lyrics.

 

[theron]

The site is unavailible. Try posting the lyrics in the thread. I'm sure a couple people will give a read.

Theron.

 

[badgas]

Yeah, Theron is right, the link is dead, so is your guest book, and some of your other links.

Repost it with the lyrics on this thread.

Nice tribute to the Joey Ramone.

 

[kylosius]

try left clicking on it and saving. if you go to the main page it's new now. so links should work. here's the lyrics (they may be different from the demo)
can't be left behind

walk through the halls at school
it seems i don't belong
it makes me wonder why
i haven't broken down to cry

it seems when you leave your friends
that your new life begins
some of us can't take the pain
thats why we go insane

i paint a picture on my face
let's me relieve my disgrace
at only age 15
my worst fear now is me

(bridge thingy)
new jersey is my home
not arid, arizona
someday i swear i'll be back
and i'll be home again

 

[kylosius]

btw, the song is two years old, i'm not a trained singer so i sing off-key (punk/emo type vocals)

 

[kylosius]

btw, the song is two years old, i'm not a trained singer so i sing off-key (punk/emo type vocals)