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I got a new mix I'm working on that's almost there that I'd love to get some feedback on so I can improve upon what I have already. This track is a little different than your standard hip-hop track. Let me know what you think. It's called "All Love" and can be found at the link below.

Thanks in advance

Stray

www.mp3.com/PerpetualProductio
 
Nice!!!!!!

But from your chord progressions I can tell that you are geared more towards rock and some classical than straight hiphop.

Truthfully I believe that some more rock appeal would make that song a billboard-topping hit!!!

Tell if you you usually do other types of music to that I won't feel like I'm going crazy or some sh!t.!!!!

If you do, try making that song conform more to the characteristics or that genre(without losing sight of the original concept).........I think it will make it quite a banga...


P.S.
I am a HipHop fan.

But.........sampling and searching for samples hass allowed me to gain an appreciation of all forms or music from classical, to blues, to funk, to pop, to mood music, to easy listening, to rock of the early 50's, to today's rock/rap mixture(often called "riffs and rhymes" because of its use of rock guitar riffs in junction with rap lyrics and presentation)
 
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Atillah said:

sampling and searching for samples hass allowed me to gain an appreciation to accept the fact that I like men
:rolleyes:
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You like to roll yo eyes dont you girl.You always sample.Can you cum with something original at least once.....
BTW-No more sampling from Camrons intros;) .Thought I forgot....lololololololololololol:D
and they say I'm fake......lollolololololololololololo
And make sure you wipe that shit stain off ya mouth and teeth before you speak my name.You know you suppose to keep it clean wit me bitch.Now give me $20...:p
 
All this from the smae fag that did the pictoral equivalent of taking someone elses song and posting it on his site saying it was his own?

Faggs never cease to amaze me...............
 
By the way......i don't post too many beats without samples(so far I have posted six) just in case a plagerizing fagg like you gets any ideas....First I'll sue you, then the artist i sampled will sue you:D
 
Fingaz, can't you just fuck off? Sampling is hiphop in it's purest nature... At first, hiphop was all about sampling... You would mix drums, with basses, with melodies, with percussions... What was/is beautiful is the fact that all the samples mixed together gave/give birth to a new song. It was/is all about recycling...

Later, Westside producers (mostly) introduced the uses of synths... But they were still used in conjonction with samples...

Your tellin' us Dr.Dre isn't original? Tupac's producers weren't original?

Now don't get me wrong, I don't say that instrumentals based only on synths aren't hiphop...

So I will say it to you, loudly and proudly again: FUCK YOU

AND YES! I still say you're fake... until you show me what yo able to do (Not what you rip from other rappers...)

Have a nice day, dickhead
Beathoven
 
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Oh, by the way FINGAZ... Here's a broom so you can gather up your teeth. :D

Beathoven
 
Atillah, you're not crazy I work with all genres. Thanks for the listen and review. I feel you on what you're saying but, that's kind of the point of the track and my whole vibe in reference to hip-hop. I like to make songs that blend as many genres as possible without sounding intentional. I am actually a classical and jazz drummer and my partner has been taking guitar lessons for about 2 years now so soon we'll be doing more organic stuff that will probably be exactly what you're talking about. Right now it's hard to make rock music on synths and not sound fake and I don't use loops.

Fingaz, thanks for the listen. Can you tell me why you think the lyrics are wack? I have thick skin, I can take it.

Stray
 
Hey stray,


I have every intention of listening to this track..... When I get a moment later on I'm gonna give you some feedback......
 
Aight bro.......

The music
your piano talent is shining through... I really really like the vibe of the music....... The drums and bass are good and clear...... I think what I like most about it is its different....... I like hearing different especially when its good music like this track.... I liked the different music drops within the track...maybe do more more can't hurt to try it....like the intro and how it falls into the verse....I can't really criticize the music at all cuz its pretty much there...the mix sounds good too.....:D


The Delivery

can make or break a track.... The theme is good unlike fingaz the lyrics don't bother me....the delivery of the lyrics is whats important here..... You definately got a good voice......and you get away with delivery, however a smooth like Fabulous type delivery would make this track excel. You are singing it with passion which is cool...but a sense of tryin to convince me is what is takin away from it.......... I would work on this for 1 reason and 1 reason only...


you have a good single right here..... make it as good as you can theres nuthing better than taking a good song and making it even better...............

The panning works within the track...can tell you like the panning knobs...heheheheh

Anutha suggestion........ is keep the chorus pretty much the same but add an R&B flavor harmonizing in the background.....

Till the way we diiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiieeeeeeeeeeeeeeeee

real smooth bring this track out big time..... the music steps up in the chorus but the vocals pretty much stay the same except you flow alittle harder......not hooking the audience........ the R&B will help step that chorus up to a catchy vibe......... then at the very end I would do a male and female combo R&B harmonizing together and then fade out
 
Gec,

Now that is what I call a review and exactly what I'm looking for. I appreciate the comments on the music. I think I may go for a few more changes, like you say they never hurt. Thanks for pointing out the fact that what you hear is different, that is my whole goal. I want to offer something no one else can.

My partner, the vocalist on the track, will definitely appreciate your comments on the vocals and delivery. I agree that some changes in the delivery to smoothen things out would probably work well. The chorus suggestion you made is something I'm going to take a look at as well. I think that may add some more depth and different sound to hook the audience more.

Yeah, I love working with panning. I just found the hyperdraw function in Logic which lets you draw panning. It was too much fun so I may have overdone it. Do you think the panning is too much?

As I said before I thank you for taking the time to listen and give a detailed response. This type of feedback is very useful to me and I will take all your comments into consideration as I work to finish the song.

Thanks,

Stray
 
Fingaz, I'm waiting to hear back from you. You say something is wack you need to explain why you think that way. Stand behind your statements or don't make them. Are you here to aggrevate people or to get ahead in the music business? All we've seen from you are lies so I'd have to assume the former. If so go away and take your worthless comments with you. If not, you got a lot to prove and a lot to explain and there's no better time than the present.

Stray
 
Nice... Like the track and the MCee... Keep em bangin...

Rat Diggy
 
Since you asked nicely

Like I said.I like the beat.The lyrics are lacking.The rapper sounds like A caucasian wanna-be hip-hopper.(BTW-I know you're the caucasian persuasion;) .Nice intro.Lyrics & voice tone is pretty basic.The kids on beverly hills 90210 might find some appeal to it:D .It sorta make me wanna get up and do the MC Hammer running man..lolol..lmao:D (thats jus off lyrics tho).I think you should redo your chorus like this :



Its all wack baby/gonna sit and watch it flop/rather or not cuz you know this is jus gonna drop/Etc,Etc. .........It fit you better;) .

No disrespect.But I'm getting a serious hard-core Vanilla Ice.Vibe.If your goal was to be basic on the lyrics.You did achieve that. :p .The beat was nice though............

It all wack baby/wack till the day that you.die/Etc.Etc.

1-love
 
Damn. I thought I replied to this already.

I peeped it out a while back. The beat it tight. Sounds real clear and everthing has its place and space.

I think the lyrics are average. The delivery is average. Voice reminds me of them cats from CAMP LO. Nothing besides that stands out. Sounds like dude maybe just didn't get ill enough on the overdub. Is that U Stray?

Can't say noting about te mix cuz i'm on laptop speakers. Everthing sounds real clear and in place. Wish i could hear the panning ya'll talked about. might peep it later./,

Overall it's a good song. Not really my type of song but I'd probably pump it if I was digging the CD it was on. With the topic being cover so many times it'd be kinda hard for radio sucess. IMO.
 
Can’t listen because I can’t stream. No mp3 download.:(

barefoot
 
DJ fingaz, gave you a chance to redeem yourself in at least some of our eyes and you failed poorly. No further comment for you.

Raticus and Lazi, thanks for the listens and comments

Lazi, No that's not me, that's my partner. If you want to hear me check out "This Is Life" on my site. You'll hear me along with the MC on this track.

You think he sounds like Camp Lo huh? I used to tell him, "you sound like Sonny Cheba". He definitely kind of does. I actually love Camp Lo even though most of the time I can't understand what they hell they are talking about.

We do songs like this with beaten topic matter to get airplay. These types of songs are always on the radio. We just do it in a different way than most, I think.

Again thanks for the comments fellas, keep em coming.

Stray

www.mp3.com/PerpetualProductio
 
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