drummerboy_04AP
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This is a lot different than the other set of lyrics I posted, being more alternative/folk influenced as opposed to alternative/punk ( i guess... pft, labels..)
I wrote this a while ago, and now after re-reading it, I wonder if it needs a chorus or not...
Here it is:
Just like a spidder, he crawls... over his own creations,
connecting the lines, creating theories,
to aid in getting him,
where he wants to be.
He lacks a lot,
of what few others have,
and the crickets are chirping, yelling,
"use what you have!",
but really you dont give a damn,
all you can here is the sounds,
that you cant make...
And now you're trapped,
in that spiders web,
kicking and screaming,
and you've got a feeling,
that this is where,
you'd wind up...
Already I can see I have some things I need to rethink. Idk if i like the "creating theories" part, but i do think it fits with my intentions. Also, the "to aid in getting him, where he wants to be"... doesnt quite make sense in the scheme of things, seeing as spiders dont really make their webs for travelling purposes... I guess it could be seen as like a spider dropping down from the ceiling on its silk string.
Idk, thats my self critique. What are YOU'RE thoughts?
I wrote this a while ago, and now after re-reading it, I wonder if it needs a chorus or not...
Here it is:
Just like a spidder, he crawls... over his own creations,
connecting the lines, creating theories,
to aid in getting him,
where he wants to be.
He lacks a lot,
of what few others have,
and the crickets are chirping, yelling,
"use what you have!",
but really you dont give a damn,
all you can here is the sounds,
that you cant make...
And now you're trapped,
in that spiders web,
kicking and screaming,
and you've got a feeling,
that this is where,
you'd wind up...
Already I can see I have some things I need to rethink. Idk if i like the "creating theories" part, but i do think it fits with my intentions. Also, the "to aid in getting him, where he wants to be"... doesnt quite make sense in the scheme of things, seeing as spiders dont really make their webs for travelling purposes... I guess it could be seen as like a spider dropping down from the ceiling on its silk string.
Idk, thats my self critique. What are YOU'RE thoughts?