Miser:
Even though there appears to be primarily just a guitar/piano interaction thing going on here...it seems a bit cluttered. They seem to be stepping on each other a bit and I don't know if that is more of an arrangement thing or a mixing thing - or maybe I'm just full of it??
Yep! [not 'full of it'.....correct!!!]
The guitar riff is really nice. The piano comes in too soon, is not in tune with the guitar [or the guitar is out of tune....or it has intonation problems] and the piano plays a chord that identifies the root chord every time the guitar riff goes to the IV chord.....the progression gets ambiguous...cluttered!
Move guitar right, piano left, to get them out of each other's turf.
I'd suggest re-recording the guitar... in-tune...changing the strings, and making sure you get the full-range beautiousness of the instrument...wood, clang, boom......and make it the feature. Play half the notes on the piano...or just block quiet chords, along with an occasional supporting line, complimenting what the acoustic does...unision or harmony, heavy on the suspended fourth and second notes to keep it airy.
The riff and the words and melody are really nice. Try to showcase them. The added elements need to be more subtle, quiet, supportive...not counterpoint. I know the impulse is to dress things up; the core of the song doesn't need it. Too busy!
It's a beautiful song.
ps...steal an acoustic upright bass and lay some sweet, swaying , simple bottom hook on this baby!!!
I'd also love to hear the vox up...and free of FX or doubling...except in the choruses, when y' wanna build dynamics.