She's the one

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This is the first song I ever wrote.

It took me nearly four long, torturous years to complete.
I've put every inch of my heart and soul into this song.

It's 2011 now, and I've decided it's time to make a single out of my old recordings.
This song will be re-recorded as part of my first album I'm working on.

Thank you for reading and listening to my song.


Fading Music
 
I'm confused, is this the new recording or your gonna re-record this song. I might try singing this a whole step higher, some low notes seemed strained. The snare's a bit loose. I felt like the song should reach a build-up a little sooner IDK. Enjoyed listening.
 
Thank you for you comment PDP.

When I wrote this song back in 2006 I didn't knew anything about songwriting, recording or how to play certain instruments besides the piano, let alone how to mix it properly.
As a result, I ended up with a limited amount of bad recordings with a couple of bad chords in it etc..

I've made quite a few mistakes and learned from it, I've accepted that this song is technically-wise not perfect.
This song was not meant to be released to public in the first place.


Just to be clear, this is an old recording.
I will re-record this song as part of my first album I'm working on.

The song will include several changes such as tempo and pitch.
 
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Decent recording - your post made it sound like it would be a disaster. It's better than a few of the "first" recordings I've heard here. So I'm thinking you're mixed this a few times over the years and this is your latest?
Okay since this isn't bad now, save a few pitch spots in the vocals, what are you going to do to improve upon an already decent mix???
Great song - it a bit sparse but it says a lot with what it has and has room for lots of additional stuff but can stand quite well as it is....
 
I say keep working on it dude. I think it all sounds pretty decent but the drums. It's like it is all processed pretty well, but the drums, that stick out like a sore thumb. I wish I had a solution for this, but I am not good enough at recording the drums myself.

Also, there are many parts at the end that drown out the vox and need to be eq'd a bit. Dude this is all just what I think might help, not what I know will work, but keep at it because I like your sound.

Trump
 
@ido1957 :
Thank you for your comment.

First, listening to your own song for about 4 years isn't good for your mental health.
I started noticing the tiniest flaw making it easy to criticize my own work.

Due to a limited resource 3 sampled drum kits were recycled into this song.
This introduced problems such as OH / ROOM not fully matching the drum kit.

I used to throw loads of stuff and effects into this song, it became a pretty much unorganized mess.
I like to only use a set of instruments for this song to keep it simple and organized.
The album version of this song will feature additional lyrics in the end which I feel is "now" more dated to what this song is about.

These are the main things I will be working on.

- Vocals
- Acoustics & Miking techniques
- Full matching drum kit
- More organic atmosphere pad
- Guitar and chords
- Instrument tuning
- Mono compatibility

@trumpino1
Thank you!

As for drums, read above.

I was seaching for a dark and desperate sound that fits the nature of this song.
The microphones and techniques used for this song made it sound pop-ish which makes it hard to EQ without ruining the sound.
 
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Your signing voice is very expressive, which was good. I didn't care for the reverb on it it though.

The piano has trouble cutting through the mix. It's a bit muffled.

I heard a little pop at 1:14 and a bigger one at 1:15.

I thought the reverb on the snare was a little too big. I'd go for a small room verb on everything in this mix.

At about 2:47 or so the instruments seem to get louder and they start to cover up the vocal.

To me the chorus needs backing vocals - whether the sing the lyrics or just do "ah's" over the chord progression. The chorus doesn't "pop" enough as it is.
 
Thank you for your feedback TripleM

I simply forgot to change the buffer size before I recorded my vocals which obviously resulted into clicks.
You're right about the snare and the piano, I'll keep that in mind.

In 2:47 I used feedback of an electric guitar.
The idea was to build up that sound from there and let all the other instrument/vocal tracks get sucked into it towards the end.

"chorus needs backing vocals" Good point, I get that a lot.
I'll try to add more fullness to the backing vocals and make it pop out a little more.

Again, I appreciate your feedback.
 
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In 2:47 I used feedback of an electric guitar.
The idea was to build up that sound from there and let all the other instrument/vocal tracks get sucked into it towards the end.
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I think that's a good idea. I might suggest a couple of things... Make a slight EQ cut in the guitar feedback somewhere in the 3Khz - 6Kzh octave so that it doesn't cover the vocal so much. Then I'd boost the vocal a couple of db's right there.
 
something is funky with the drums. Sounds like a thin sheet of fabric was draped over the whole thing. Not quite a blanket, but sounds like the dynamics of the drums are a bit muffled.

The songwriting, I think is really well done. Really enjoyed it. Like the intro, the body, and the outro. Piano sound is really enjoyable, and the part I liked best is the expression in your voice. Really cuts when contrasted against the ethereal sound in the beginning.

For a demo, this is well done. I'd like to hear the re-recording of it, for sure. Thanks for sharing.
 
Just read all the comments, and sounds like you've got the drums covered. If you're interested in getting drums done remotely, I might be able to help.
 
OK. Having not read others' comments:

This one is chock full of unrealized potential. I love the tune.

The melody is spot-on alt. The mix is burying the vox, though.

Suggest:
Cut the synth intro at about 10 seconds, and get right to the 1st verse...the first chord and swell really got the hair on my neck standing up....but the effect was immediately lost after the chord change at 10 sec. Interest dived.....and the part became a dirge. Cutting it and swinging into the verse would keep interest and momentum at peak.

I liked the sounds of the instruments.

The big opportunity missed....and one step short of being realized, is the dynamic build through the tune: Big guitars L&R....vocal sung up an octave with angst and emotion....then dive back to the level of verse one...and drift away.

The first verses were at one level; then it stepped up when you sang the melody up, roughly, a fifth. I kept waiting for the orgasm in the last verses or chorus. Kinda got a let-down.

I think that if you really wailed the last cycle before the ending, the emotional progression would be complete. Foo Fighters are masters of the craft, for example.

This is a really enjoyable work. Some of the stuff I hear here is doomed, compositionally....sound-wise. They cannot be improved by tweaking the mix or EQ-ing something. This tune is one of the exceptions, where the work sounds good, and is compositionally and musically interesting and well executed, but doesn't fulfill it's potential.
Wicked nice work. Hope you give it what it begs!

Having read the other comments: I think the piano sound IS dark. But it fits the mood...reminded me of a Beetoven sonata I've heard , played on a similar-sounding piano. As for the drum sound, it reminded me of Evanescense' work....also masters of the dark and forboding.

In sum, you can tweak the crap out of the sounds; but compositionally, the work will withstand sonic weaknesses. Craft the build up one notch before the outro. The complete story is then told. The plane gets off the runway.
 
This is a problem mixing VST instruments and acoustic instruments when the technique isn't right on. Drums and acoustic sound a little distant. I'd give the guitar some high end to help it cut through, and lower the low mids to decrease mud (or rerecord and see if you can improve technique). Snare and kick need to be tightened up a bit, at least the snare is cracking, so you're on the right track.
 
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