Shake It - whaddya think?

[knightsy]

Hey, this is the first piece I've posted up here, so please be gentle.

http://www.nowhereradio.com/artists/album.php?aid=3904&alid=-1

Just go there and click on "Shake It" - and if you're bored, maybe the others as well!

I'm interested in what people think of the structure more than anything, I know the lyrics are the same in the 1st and 2nd verses, and I'm working on that.

Thanks for your time!

 

[bigwillz24]

I actually like this one.... you might want to try to get the vocals to blend in more with the overall mix.

 

[knightsy]

Yeah, I got that on another board too... Did you listen to the hifi or lofi version? I brought them up for the lofi version... just a consideration for those on dialup I guess.

 

[rataplan]

I don't know if it's more than a feeling, yea where is my mind, but hell it smells like you ripped

 

[Calwood]

Be gentle? I dont get that. Do you mean you dont want honesty and are just looking for people to say they like it? That really never gets ya anywhere in my opinion.
But,..ok,...


its great!!!

Take 'er easy,..
Calwood

 

[knightsy]

No guys, I don't mean I'm only looking for positive comments - I mean nearly everybody says that when they put their first song up, why should I break with tradition?

In any case, I've gotten plenty of constructive criticism on this one, which has given me a direction to take it in. So flame away people!

 

[knightsy]

I've updated this one now, it's a lot slicker.