Revised Web Site... Feedback and Proofreading Appreciated

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Thanks guys for all the help with this. I just registered with PayPal and have a "Buy Now" button on the CD page. Very easy to set up and much more professional. A couple layout edits still to go but I'm almost there. Sure is good to have all the extra eyes on call here! :cool:

Tim
 
Timothy Lawler said:
Thanks guys for all the help with this. I just registered with PayPal and have a "Buy Now" button on the CD page. Very easy to set up and much more professional. A couple layout edits still to go but I'm almost there. Sure is good to have all the extra eyes on call here! :cool:

Tim
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To assist you further with the development of your site, you may want to review the tutorials at http://www.w3schools.com. They have some good tutorials on there that may benefit you.

Believe me, to write HTML, especially if you're using a "static" site (not connected to a database or anything), you could easily get away with using Notepad, or any other text editor.

Good luck! I hope you sell a lot of CDs! :-)
 
Hi Tim, you asked for some proof-reading. Here are my comments page by page.


About Me

' I also play on two CD's produced...' - Lose the apostrophe on 'CD's'. CD's what exactly? Remember, an apostrophe is possessive.


Listen

'of the Beatles classic with...' - Add an apostrophe after Beatles, as it is their classic so 'the Beatles' classic'.

'arranged for two guitar by' - Two guitars rather than two guitar?

'Gabriel Faure' - Maybe an accent over the 'e' in Faure, if you want to be accurately French.

General a little inconsistent with full-stops (periods) - some paragraphs have them, some don't. Choose to have or have not and stick with it.

Purchase CD

No noticeable errors.


Recording Studio

'highest quality mic's and preamps' - Again, ditch the apostrophe. Mic's what? :) Same again with 'pre's' and the other 'mic's' on the page.


Home Studio Tips

'much more effect on' - Use 'affect'. Something can have an affect on something else, while an effect is something like a plug-in, or a 'special effect', more like a noun.

'try two mic's' - Apostrophe...same again on last line.


My Teaching and Teaching Materials - no errors.


Links

'During the 90's' - No apostrophe after 90. It is the first part of the decade name that has been dropped, so you'd write '90s, with the apostrophe first, not between 0 and s.

Again, sort out full-stops - either use them consistently or not at all.


I hope that helps!

Thanks.
 
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Wow! Excellent proofreading. Many thanks Agent47. I'll be doing some more editing for sure. Man, you're not letting me get away with anything. :)

You're obviously well schooled in writing... what do you think about the issue of "mic's and pre's" usage where the apostrophe represents the missing letters of the full word? (microphones = mic's and preamps = pre's) The issue was debated on the board sometime recently if I remember correctly.... but I don't remember the outcome other than lots of our usual arguing.

EDIT: Just made the changes. Still thinking about "mic's and pre's", heh-heh. Thanks again Agent47.

Tim
 
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Nice and clean for a lot of information. Like everyone said, a PAY PAL account can really help you. You will get more buys for sure. Make your site work for you. :D

You might not want so much for people to purchase products, but it's great to know while you're sleeping that your site is working 24/7.

More photos would be nice also. Some photos that explain you right of the top.

Otherwise, good info... :D
 
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More photos would be nice also. Some photos that explain you right of the top.
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For some reason I find that very difficult. But you're right, I think.

Tim
 
Ya, I had problems thinking of photos at first to. Contact me if you want to brainstom and get ideas...
 
Glad to be of help!

About the 'pre's' issue... To be honest, I'd personally ditch the apostrophe.

An apostrophe denotes possession, ie:

John's computer had crashed.

or

The PC's monitor was smaller than those of the other PCs.

It can also represent something missing, like decade abbreviations:

John's '60s dress-sense looked ridiculous.

or

Macs don't crash.

You're right - mic and pre are shortened versions, but as the missing bit is at the end of the word, I'd drop the apostrophe. I'd write:

The mixer's pres were dirty.

or

The mics were already set up.

So as far as I know, one would lose the apostrophe at the end of words, otherwise it looks possessive.

You'd be amazed how these mistakes crop up in even in published media. Often I see posters with incorrect apostrophes and bizarre capitalisation. Just the other day I saw a poster for Virgin Megastore offering cut-price 'CD's'. Wrong.

Thanks for the compliment - I'm not really that well-schooled in English, I'm just a regular user, so you pick up the rules the more you use it...

The language on your site was actually quite good - I only picked up on a few errors. It's still miles better than most website offerings. Most people haven't got a clue about how to use apostrophes and seem to slap them into any word that has an 's' at the end.

Your spelling was good - it's amazing how much bad spelling there is on the net. A lot of people seem to think there's an 'a' in 'definite'/'definitely', the same goes for 'independent'. No 'a'.

Anyway, good site, and I'm glad to be a help...

Thanks.
 
Great looking site Tim. Clean, economical but with a lot of information. Yeah, the scrolling on the first page is a little excessesive but that's just a matter of code. I was thinking of using that Paypal business plan that was mentioned above when I get my site up and running. Not very many options in that area on the net yet I'm afraid.

Great music too. :D
 
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Thanks Chris. When you say scrolling on the first page, do you mean the fact that the black background continues way down low but there's no content there? Or is it doing something weird with the text and photo... like putting those down lower where you have to scroll to them? When I view it the text and photo is in the top section, viewable without scrolling. Just checking.

Tim
 
Yeah, the picture seems to go on for quite awhile. Is it the picture, or is it just a background color that's making it scroll down? If it's the picture you might think about cutting it down a little, unless you're going to add some text or other pictures down below the main picture.

While I was scrolling down I kept expecting something more to come up. When nothing came up, it just seemed kind of strange, that's all. You know?
 
You mean the picture is taller than the monitor screen? Uh-oh. What browser are you using?

The page length thing is something I don't currently have a way around. I'm starting to learn Frontpage so I can get the page more up to date graphically, but with what I'm using now I have to have all the pages the same length regardless of how much is actually on them. Dumb, I know.

Tim
 
I'm using Firefox. I went back and all the pages actually do it. Like you said though, it's probably Frontpage that is doing it. Strange that it would do that. Never tried it so don't know how it works. I'm trying to do everything in Chami's HTML-Kit. It's just a basic editor, but it seems to work pretty well. Nice little learning tool too.

The site looks real good though.
 
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