Great beginning to this song...
I think the biggest weakness here is the sound on the vox. Not the performance, which sounds good, but the odd "roomy" verb, which doesn't work for me. The rest sounds very nice, and when the vox come in it's kinda like "ow... recorded in his living room."
Good song. Good performance. Just get those vox nestled in with the music better and this would be real good.
Chris