PoeticIntensity: Original -> First attempt at doing it all.

[PoeticIntensity]

Okay... So most of the songs I post here are recordings of other people. Well, ya'll have inspired me to write and record something completely original. My guitar skills are bested by most infants, and I can't sing worth a hoot, but hey... Here's my best shot.

Written and recorded in 3 days.

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[kcearl]

lol brilliant...a real garage feel about it..


first guitars in need to come down a bit and lead vocals up imo..I love the self modesty, this is really good


maybe G will have more to say...

If i had anything to add it would be to move this more towards "the cramps" vibe, or the "Black lips"...dont clean it up too much

 

[Greg_L]

Haha, I liked it. It's simple and kind of angry. I had no idea you had this in you. Kudos on not over-drumming it. The drums stayed solid and tasteful. The guitars are a little overpowering and the kick is kind of weak and buried. Fix those things and you're off to a good start.

 

[PoeticIntensity]

lol brilliant...a real garage feel about it..


first guitars in need to come down a bit and lead vocals up imo..I love the self modesty, this is really good


maybe G will have more to say...

If i had anything to add it would be to move this more towards "the cramps" vibe, or the "Black lips"...dont clean it up too much

Thanks, Keith. Good ears on the vocals and guitars. I guess "doing everything" makes all the instruments a bit more subjective to me... It's a heckuva lot different recording other people, and then recording myself.

Haha, I liked it. It's simple and kind of angry. I had no idea you had this in you. Kudos on not over-drumming it. The drums stayed solid and tasteful. The guitars are a little overpowering and the kick is kind of weak and buried. Fix those things and you're off to a good start.

Right on. This was a fun one. I guess this makes twice in one week. First trance music with Keith and now "angry" music with you... haha... My musical tastes are... ahem... large and wide.

Thanks for the nits, guys. I've posted an updated tune in this post, and above in the original.

The update is simply a gain of 1.5db in kick (with modest boost in click EQ), a 1db reduction in guitars. 1db gain in vocals, and .5 db boost in overall drums. I like this version much more.

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[kcearl]

amazing how such little tweaks can make such a difference....thats a much better mix straight off....


I dont think Id do anything else with it, its really good as is....

 

[Greg_L]

Yup, better.

 

[joeym]

Great punky tune, Jason!
You sang it really well, reminded me a bit of the Stranglers in a good way. Your drumming is rock-solid. What I miss is a little more edgy distorted guitars and some low-end in the bass. Snare sounds good although I prefer more head than bottom (umm...no...I don't mean to sound erotic...) but that's down to taste. Nice work!

Joey

 

[squibble94]

Sounds good man. I like the drum sound. The vocals kind of fit the song.

 

[heatmiser]

The drums sound awesome on this P.I.

The overall sound is cool too. Has a late '70's feel to it. There is a nice driving quality to the guitar/drums interaction. Maybe bring the bass guitar forward a bit? It is perhaps distant sounding at times. I really liked when the higher BGVs come in.

There is something about the pacing of the vocals in the verses that threw me off, but there really aren't too many syllabels going on there, so I'm not too sure what it is. Good job man.

 

[PoeticIntensity]

amazing how such little tweaks can make such a difference....thats a much better mix straight off....


I dont think Id do anything else with it, its really good as is....

Gracias... I've found that the closer you get to getting the mix "right" - the more difference a little change makes.

Yup, better.

Thanks Greg. I neglected to thank you for your compliment on my drumming in your original comment. Very nice of you to say, and it really feels quite validating having someone like you make that particular comment (holding back, and keeping the drumming minimal) - because it almost kicked my butt doing it. Glad someone caught it and appreciates it. Bah... Nobody understands us drummers anyway...

Great punky tune, Jason!
You sang it really well, reminded me a bit of the Stranglers in a good way. Your drumming is rock-solid. What I miss is a little more edgy distorted guitars and some low-end in the bass. Snare sounds good although I prefer more head than bottom (umm...no...I don't mean to sound erotic...) but that's down to taste. Nice work!

Joey

Thanks Joey. I can always count on you for an honest opinion. The arena of "guitar sounds" is completely new to me. I had no idea how hard it is to get a great guitar sound... I would have liked a bit more distortion, but I wasn't gonna risk screwing the sound up more. I'll get there.... slowly...

Sounds good man. I like the drum sound. The vocals kind of fit the song.

Thanks for consistently commenting, squibble. As soon as I'm able to give you rep, I'll do it. Heck... I haven't been able to give ANYONE rep on this one... I need to spread it out more, I guess. Anyway.. Thanks.

The drums sound awesome on this P.I.

The overall sound is cool too. Has a late '70's feel to it. There is a nice driving quality to the guitar/drums interaction. Maybe bring the bass guitar forward a bit? It is perhaps distant sounding at times. I really liked when the higher BGVs come in.

There is something about the pacing of the vocals in the verses that threw me off, but there really aren't too many syllabels going on there, so I'm not too sure what it is. Good job man.

Yeah... Bass on this one was tough to get sounding "in your face"... For some reason, bass in my studio always sounds a bit distant. I'm mic'ing with an AKG D-112, so I know it's not the mic.... But... I agree... something is amiss. I recently purchased a new Golden Age Pre-73 pre-amp which has the proper hookups, so I'll now be able to do a direct-in from my bass amp, as well as mic'ing it. Maybe I'll re-do the bass line in that fashion, and see if I can't get the bass mix a bit more edgy... The song definitely needs it.

Thanks for taking the time to comment!

 

[singlespeak]

Hey this is cool. Nice and clear sounds on a fun song. I personally like a bit more lows. Those drums sound really good man, maybe a bit too much high on the hats. 1:33 the vocals are a-poppin' on the "uP". Backing vocals are great. The only real criticism I would have is to make the vocal melody in the verses a bit less repetitive, like they are in the bridges. I'll definitely try and get advice from you on gits though, sounds like you got it down.

 

[PoeticIntensity]

Hey this is cool. Nice and clear sounds on a fun song. I personally like a bit more lows. Those drums sound really good man, maybe a bit too much high on the hats. 1:33 the vocals are a-poppin' on the "uP". Backing vocals are great. The only real criticism I would have is to make the vocal melody in the verses a bit less repetitive, like they are in the bridges. I'll definitely try and get advice from you on gits though, sounds like you got it down.

Thanks, man. I wrote the lyrics to this song, literally in about 10 minutes. The whole song was written off of the guitar riff, which happened while I was practicing. I had no intention of writing a song. This song is nothing but fluffy-puffy brain leakage.

As far as guitars go - I'm a noob, and I know it. The guitars for this song are all recorded with an SM-57 against a Line-6 amp. Nothing fancy. I just dial in what I think a good sound is (which I suck at), and then put a mic on it. If you want good guitar sound advice, look to Joey or Greg L. They've got some SERIOUSLY rockin' guitar sounds.

Thanks for the kind post, singlespeak.

The only 2 ways you will continually suck at recording is if you 1. Quit trying to improve, or 2. Quit all together. SO DON'T QUIT!

 

[squibble94]

Thanks for consistently commenting, squibble. As soon as I'm able to give you rep, I'll do it. Heck... I haven't been able to give ANYONE rep on this one... I need to spread it out more, I guess. Anyway.. Thanks.

Thanks for taking the time to comment!

Aww shucks

 

[Greg_L]

Thanks Greg. I neglected to thank you for your compliment on my drumming in your original comment. Very nice of you to say, and it really feels quite validating having someone like you make that particular comment (holding back, and keeping the drumming minimal) - because it almost kicked my butt doing it. Glad someone caught it and appreciates it. Bah... Nobody understands us drummers anyway...

Yeah man, I can dig it. I was talking about the awesomeness of Phil Rudd in Joey's thread. You've got the chops to thrown down fills and shit. It was cool to hear you lay back and just pound out a steady churning beat. Steady and simple is way under-utilized and under-appreciated.

 

[Atom Bomb]

Great one.

I just listened to the updated one.

I like it. Alot actually.

minimilistic qualities are gripping.

You ca nfeel the energy in your drumming.

Pretty solid mix nothing to nit there.


But i'm with Joey on getting a little bit more Gain on them guits to really even out the angsty vibe.

Not like tons of gain, but just enough to add some dirt.


great.

 

[Greg_L]

I liked the gits. I think they lend a vintage dirty punk quality to the song. They sound like strats or teles through amps on the edge, like they did back in the garages of the 70's.

 

[PoeticIntensity]

Great one.

I just listened to the updated one.

I like it. Alot actually.

minimilistic qualities are gripping.

You ca nfeel the energy in your drumming.

Pretty solid mix nothing to nit there.


But i'm with Joey on getting a little bit more Gain on them guits to really even out the angsty vibe.

Not like tons of gain, but just enough to add some dirt.


great.

Thanks a lot! You don't have anything posted here, do ya? I'd love to hear some of your stuff...

I liked the gits. I think they lend a vintage dirty punk quality to the song. They sound like strats or teles through amps on the edge, like they did back in the garages of the 70's.

Thanks, Greg.. My "method" of finding guitar sounds, is flipping through the 300+ pre-fab sounds of my Line-6 Spider 75, and stopping when I find one I like.

For this song, I used 2 presets. 1 I don't remember, and the other one is one called "Captain Crunch" I recorded 2 takes with each, and flipped the pickup switch around between each one.

Not sure if I'm gonna try more distortion or not... I'll think about it a bit more.... Could be interesting.