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Is it dead? I'd concentrate on getting a single vocal performance that kicks the song before tracking the backround vox. The chord progressions need something else.
 
When I saw 'do you love me' I immediately thought of the 'Kiss' song.. Oddly enough this starts the same way, but quickly goes into it's own thing.. Just thought I would make that observation..


The vocal levels are not consistent.. sometimes they are too low, but not always. It also sounds like they could use some high end, or less lows.. either way they need to cut through more.. I heard some punches in spots.. on the guitar too..

The whole mix could use a bit more sparkle.. it's not as bad as I was expecting though.. nice job!
 
Yeah...I second the "inconsistent" vocal levels. They're almost inaudible for the first verse, but then they get louder, then they get almost too loud during the latter part of the chorus. Did you use any compression on them? Try squeezing the life out of 'em next time. I overcompress my vox, but people rarely complain that they can't hear what I'm singing. :D

The rest of the mix sounds really "live." How much of it was recorded together, or were all of the instruments tracked seperately. Forgive me for asking, but i noticed that it was recorded last Saturday, so I figure you haven't spent months tediously eq'ing seperate tracks yet.

:D
chris
 
Oh Yeah

I liked the tune and I liked "We Could Have Been Great" when I heard that awhile back too.
 
Life-giving...

Hmmmm.. Well, first off, the thing that grabbed me hardest is the drummer; specifically his left hand being VERY tentative. He needs to haul back and whack that muthah. :) It comes across a little "nancy-boy" in this iteration. Especially because it's late about half the time; meter in genre is somewhat sketchy.

The end kind of fell apart from a synchronization perspective, too.

The vocals are good, but the unevenness previously expressed is definitely apparent, and there are a few minor pitch issues.

The progression and feel sort of harken the old classic BTO song "You Ain't Seen Nothing Yet", it's even in the same key. That's not a slam. It shows a classic sense in songwriting.

Overall, it's a solid piece, that needs a litle more "pop" in the arranging department. There is almost no sonic variation between the verse and chorus; no intensity change. Only a chord structure difference signals the change. Push that bridge harder. Maybe drop in a pedaled syncopated 16th note A pattern over the top from a guitarist, imply some tension, since it's a heavy question being asked by the lyric. Sometimes, the most subtle arranging tricks do a lot.

Cheers!

Phil "Llarion: The Jazzinator" Traynor
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Well the jazzinator contributed a wealth of ideas for the song itself so I won't add anything. But the main thing I hear on the mix is the lack of 'sparkle' that Sam mentioned. It really need some more up around 10k, maybe a little lower even...say 8k. The ending sort of falls apart, I'd work on that too.

Not bad....a pretty nice song and a decent start on a mix.
 
Thanks for the help

I will try and work on all the things you guys mentioned, thanks for listening. You helped me greatly.
 
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