Please help.....

[Tyler22]

Hey what's up?

Me and my band were gonna write a song about the war anyways I am having the worste writers block I have ever had in my life!!!! I cant write a thing....anyways I posted the song here and was wondering if someone could help me out? I wrote the verse about 6 months ago but I still don't have a chorus..

All of my equipment is out at my recrording studio at my frummers house....all i had here is fruity loops(for drums), my backup squier guitar, and a little 35 watt roque amp......so i apoligize for how everything sounds lol.......

The heavier part is the chorus and the 2nd guitar that you hear picking out notes is the vocal tune so if anyone could help me out? It doesn't have to be about the war i just need something!I just need words for the chorus.

"War song 55"

http://www.soundclick.com/bands/0/fullcontactmusic.htm

 

[brummygit]

what are the words for the chorus? have you got a copy with the vocals recorded?

 

[Tyler22]

i already have the verse wrote.......i do not have the words for the chorus yet.....that is what i need help on.........its the heavy part where you can hear the second guitar picking a tune.........that is what i want the words to sound like but i cant think of any words..........sorry about the confusion

 

[brummygit]

either way, if youve got some words that youve done already, it will help to try and get an idea about how the chorus should be...?

 

[JaQsonA1]

have you taken the song down or something because i cant get to it, its saying that the song hasnt been cleared yet.

i agree with brummygit

if youve got some words that youve done already, it will help to try and get an idea about how the chorus should be...?

 

[brummygit]

try the lo-fi version. seems that only the hifi one is not working right now

 

[Tyler22]

ok sorry......here's the verse

verse-1

can you hear me now
i'm yelling out
please help me

red fills the sky and
I know why
were dying



thats all i got right now......that is the complete first verse...........has a cool beat to it....kinda hard to imagine where it goes...........yeah the hi fi dont seem to work just the low fi......thanks guys!