Over 40 Blues--"Produced" version

[theron]

Hey sir,

I've listened again........and then again and I think you should shop this tune before it becomes "the over 50....."


From a producer standpoint ( whick I will assume here in safe cyberspace and with your supreme indulgence {smiley icon of a respectully bowed head}) I'd cut the last verse......."don't turn the heads............hurts my pride.......

It is a solid, just, fittting and pouinent(sp?) verse but, I can see the song without it appealing to more takers/buyers of the tune and I can see it becoming a huge hit.

Soryy for the thin thoughts but, the prospect of you getting your just return for writing with the force and hard road talent that you do makes me wanna see you recieve some props and $ for your work.

Enough of this warm ramble,
Push it and it will sell..........


Peace and prosperity in all that is yours,

Theron.

 

[junplugged]

Wow, that was very nice. Your voice matched the song and style. The details of the lyrics I didn't get into, but that 's b/c the hook of the chorus was good enough. So the good thing about that is that the listener has more to look for on later listens.

Production sounded really pro.

The only thing I might say, to be a perfectionist an all, ya know... is that I didn't notice a climax toward the end. That's just my personal taste, but it does add something when it's there.

That was only after one listen. I'll go back, listen again, I might even change my first impressions or add stuff.

But the main thing, so far, is that I want to listen to it again b/c of the quality mix, performance and hook. And that right there is enough to be proud of.

 

[wfaraoni]

great songwriting! I agree, Im going to try a find a board that has amatuers so I dont get so depressed
Thanks for the listen

 

[Middleman]

Crawdad,

First, I really liked it. Most of the criticism has been covered. Ditto that piano sound being strange. Also the piano keeps going in a couple of places and it probably should stop when your doing those vocal punch lines.

What are you compressing the vocal with? Is that software or hardware? Very nice sound and I would have put money on the mic being a Marshall, it just has that sound. Right there in your face kinda mellow. The DMP3, that's a sweet low cost preamp and I wish I had not sold mine. I'm gonna have to buy another one.

Good job overall, great production. Now write me a version called over 50 Blues.....

 

[chrisharris]

I listened to this tune, and the one dedicated to your daughter as well. I don't know when you wrote either of them, but I love hearing you do material that seems to be more personal. To *me*, that's the juice...the nectar of the Gods, the inspiration that keeps giving, even if it's giving you a little kick to the ribs.

None of this makes any sense, but all I'm saying is, I like both of them a ton, and I respect your talent as well as your generosity of spirit.

Here's shocker for you...I don't have any mix comments.




On that daughter tune - "This bridge was made for burning"...to me, it's a cool line that's out of place, b/c that's an association normally made with negative endings of relationships...I think I know what you meant, but it just seems out to me. (just a little).

...and I'd take off "Christ" from that second line - it seems a tad wordy, and most people know who "Jesus" is.

...and I've never written a hit, so take it for what it's worth, LOL

 

[djc]

Sounds great. A good production. And if you wanted to sell the song, thats the way to go. But to be honest with you, I like the original more. I'm glad I downloaded it before you removed it. I played it for a friend of mine who is approaching 60 and he actually got tears in his eyes. No matter what you do, it will never be as good as that take IMHO. As a matter of fact I think it should be just you and one acoustic guitar. There is nothing like naked honesty. I don't know if you have any more songs, but if you do, please record some more and post them. I really like your style.