DM60
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Phantoms 3. I did notice there were 1 & 2, so maybe my critique is wrong. If so, you should maybe say Part 1, 2, 3 on each title.
OK, mix sounded pretty good. nothing I could hear. Production note, sounds like a good intro into something, a build up to something, but something never came. My two cents, I would pull this back, and find something to put on the back end, shorten what you have, then let it lead into the main. Often done, one of the best examples of how to do that is Supertramp. If you don't know them, they were masters of doing what you have and then getting it to kick into something else.
But you have a great into (or end), nice mix, just seemed like we started a journey that warmed up, but never got started. Maybe as stated 1 & 2 did the trick, didn't get a chance to listen.
OK, mix sounded pretty good. nothing I could hear. Production note, sounds like a good intro into something, a build up to something, but something never came. My two cents, I would pull this back, and find something to put on the back end, shorten what you have, then let it lead into the main. Often done, one of the best examples of how to do that is Supertramp. If you don't know them, they were masters of doing what you have and then getting it to kick into something else.
But you have a great into (or end), nice mix, just seemed like we started a journey that warmed up, but never got started. Maybe as stated 1 & 2 did the trick, didn't get a chance to listen.
Db> Music
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Thank you for listening and for the feedback! These instrumentals are definitely supposed to be a journey and I have considered doing longer ones. My concern is if they are too long no one will listen. The original version of the first one was like 7 minutes long and I just felt people would lose interest and wouldn’t invest their time into the duration and wouldn’t get the full experience so I shortened it. But maybe it’s a worth a shot!
DM60
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Yes, you are correct, that means either, break it up (but they must stand on their own), or two, make sure the good bits are there and not stay too long where it is not interesting. It is a hard call for sure. But I had listened to part 3 and there are lots of places it could be cut down. You have enough there to shorten it and keep only that which has substance (don't interlude too long
). Hopefully it this gives you at least something to help you to make better composing/arrangement/production decisions.
Db> Music
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Absolutely! Thank you for the advice!Yes, you are correct, that means either, break it up (but they must stand on their own), or two, make sure the good bits are there and not stay too long where it is not interesting. It is a hard call for sure. But I had listened to part 3 and there are lots of places it could be cut down. You have enough there to shorten it and keep only that which has substance (don't interlude too long
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TripleM
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On Phantoms 3
The soundscape you set up is good. The piano sets up the song nicely, along with the low-end drone note.
But the song needs to go somewhere. I keep waiting for something big to happen and it doesn't. A sax comes in briefly (it's a bit far back in the mix, with a lot of reverb) and then goes away. It comes back a little later and does the same thing.
The soundscape you set up is good. The piano sets up the song nicely, along with the low-end drone note.
But the song needs to go somewhere. I keep waiting for something big to happen and it doesn't. A sax comes in briefly (it's a bit far back in the mix, with a lot of reverb) and then goes away. It comes back a little later and does the same thing.
Db> Music
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Seems to be a common critique. I do plan on taking it somewhere. Sometimes I feel I just wanna hurry up and finish something Instead of taking the time to make it what I really want it to be.
DM60
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That right there is something you need to workout. Allow it to organically create itself. Unless there is a reason to be on a deadline, then don't be on a deadline. That being said, don't allow it not to be finished. There is a fine balance between the two.
There are many an unfinished song laying in drawers, now folders on HDs out there. I think pushing to finish is good, but don't rush it either.