thanks for everyone's comments, i agree with most of them on the performance factor. i just wanted an opinion on the song so i posted the first take of it. im re-recording it today and hopefully have something a lot better to post.
as for the singing style, im sticking with the breathy vocals on it but it needs more melody and rythem to it. and i like the guitar sound i got out of it, it needs to be smoothed out a little bit, but i like good bassy feel to it.
as for the performance, its my first try at finger picking an entire song and also my first use of a capo..so its been more fun to play this song for some reason. anyway, i'll be working on this for a little while and i'll repost it when i feel its ready.
also, i cant get a compression on it without a lot of work of recording and re-recording guitar parts and switching tracks and overdubbing etc. so i think im gonna just avoid all that and wait until i can afford a compression box or pedal. anyway, thanks for everyone's comments. check out my other songs on my site
www.orionrock.cjb.net and tell me what you think of those. the recording quality is the best its gonna get i think though, im planning on going into a studio this summer anyway.