The intro singing reminds me of Daniel Landa, but then again almost everything in Czech reminds me of Landa. Aint bad. I understand a few Bits here and there. Mix wise I'm suck too much myself to comment your stuff.
The second version sounds better. I don't know what you did to it but it's better.
PS. Melodically kinda reminds me of a Ukrainian Psycho Band called Mad Heads.