One Take Wonder

[wfaraoni]

Great song, but not up to your usual recording standard I'm afraid. Very nice subtle guitar changes ,real fresh guitar work as usual like at 1:20. Id like to hear you do this with better recording effort.


All Praises
Bill

 

[dres]

Dres,
I loved it! In fact I'd like to cover it....... With your permission of course! I'd have to yank that capo off though. It's funny your voice sounds a lot like we could be brothers....guess we are in a way, huh? Well done!

I've found my clone ? Please go ahead and cover it if you like ... otherwise we could collaborate. pm me. Thanks for the encouragement.

 

[dres]

absolutely love this.. fine as a solo or......if we could resurrect a Toto I can hear it rockin all the FM radios...

Toto eh ? Thanks for the compliment !

 

[dres]

I can hear this working well. Were you intending to have the kids come in during the chorus? It'll make the parents cry I'm sure (and I mean tears of joy). That chorus is just very pretty.

I don't know if the kids you're intending to teach are capable of three part harmony. But man that would sound terrific if they could pull it off.

But don't they say you should never work with children and animals in showbiz ? I spose anything is possible ... come to think of it my mother-in-law is a deputy principal at a christian primary school........ Hmmmmm

 

[dres]

pretty nice song.

THe phrase "to bring us safely home, it is your grace that will lead us to your own, it is your grace that leads us safely home"
is really beautiful melodically.

The voice sounds good. I think it will be even better if you tried singing a few notes lower.

score: b+

Wow ... a b+ from CyanJaguar for a 20 min mono "utility" recording ! Thanks mate.

Just to clear up the words though:

Verse1

You can see that we're no angels
Sinful natures drag us down
We don't want to be your enemy, or face your condemnation
So we will turn and trust in you

Chorus:

We are your children, adopted as your own
We call you father, we will never be alone
You gladly suffered, to bring us safely home
It is your grace, that will lead us to your throne

Verse 2
Tradgedy has often struck us
Suffering that won't subside
Keep us focused, on the furture, when our glory is revealed
So we will put our trust in you


The words are based on selected verses from Romans Ch 8

 

[dres]

nice clean recording dres......great song

Thanks powder. This is about as clean as it gets. NTK -> Focusrite Voicemaster -> Gina 20 bit A/D -> cubase. No eq, No compression, No normalisation and No effects whatsoever. Oh .. and no pop filter either

 

[dres]

Re: ***********Moderator************

Very Nice song I really enjoyed.

Thanks.

I even get to host a rant on my thread ! Wow

 

[dres]

The song is pretty cool and the guitar sounds real nice. I would've worked on the sound of the vocal track a little more with EQ and Reverb and as Gidge pointed out, the song could benefit from more production, but in all, it's a really cool tune.

Carlos

Thanks for your comments. If you read my initial post you'll see this is just a "utility" recording I thought I'd share. I had no intention of "producing it" at the time. But will all this positive feedback I might consider doing that.

Thanks for listening.. glad you like the tune.

 

[dres]

Great song, but not up to your usual recording standard I'm afraid. Very nice subtle guitar changes ,real fresh guitar work as usual like at 1:20. Id like to hear you do this with better recording effort.

All Praises
Bill

This is not my usual "production" standard. read the previous thread for an explaination. Looks like I'm getting a lot of votes to do more on this tune however.

Thanks for listening Bill

 

[ashulman]

I'm struggling with the use of the word adopted here, and not just because I was adopted myself and so were my kids. The word implies that we are actually somebody else's children but were taken in, or adopted, by God ( I am assuming this is essentially what we would call Christian inspiration music). I'm not religious or Christian, but I wonder if that's what you really want to say. To me it sounds like you used the word because it fit and on the surface, seemed to make sense. If we were adopted by God, who gave birth to us? To me this could be the starting point of a fascinating philisophical exploration, but probably not what you intended.

 

[a_super_critic]

... I was so impressed with the results I thought I'd share it with others...

turn thine other cheek brother. this is going to get ugly...

1. you don't sing very well. way out of key. try drop tuning your guitar a half. maybe just maybe that might help.

2. you need to add some variation to your guitar playing. try some 'inverts' or add a 7th or a min9th here and there. might detract from the vocals in a good way.

3. work on your timing. ebb and flow is effective when used right. you don't use it right. play a metronome in your sleep until you breathe in correct time.

 

[caryindy]

I'm struggling with the use of the word adopted here, and not just because I was adopted myself and so were my kids. The word implies that we are actually somebody else's children but were taken in, or adopted, by God ( I am assuming this is essentially what we would call Christian inspiration music). I'm not religious or Christian, but I wonder if that's what you really want to say. To me it sounds like you used the word because it fit and on the surface, seemed to make sense. If we were adopted by God, who gave birth to us? To me this could be the starting point of a fascinating philisophical exploration, but probably not what you intended.

My guess is that it is based on the scripture in Romans 8:15

For you did not receive the spirit of bondage again to fear, but you received the Spirit of adoption by whom we cry out, "Abba, Father."

Dres?

 

[ashulman]

Well see, thats what I get for not being Christian. It would seem that the Biblical use of the word adoption implies redemption, rather than the current usage. I withdraw my critique; this makes perfect sense in the context of the song.

 

[dres]

Re: Re: One Take Wonder

turn thine other cheek brother. this is going to get ugly...

1. you don't sing very well. way out of key. try drop tuning your guitar a half. maybe just maybe that might help.

2. you need to add some variation to your guitar playing. try some 'inverts' or add a 7th or a min9th here and there. might detract from the vocals in a good way.

3. work on your timing. ebb and flow is effective when used right. you don't use it right. play a metronome in your sleep until you breathe in correct time.

Well you certainly live up to your title ! No worries, thanks for your comments. Perhaps you could do a cover and show me how it should be done ?

 

[dres]

Well see, thats what I get for not being Christian. It would seem that the Biblical use of the word adoption implies redemption, rather than the current usage. I withdraw my critique; this makes perfect sense in the context of the song.

No worries. It's a common mistake ... a lot of christians don't even know what the Bible says ! Thanks for taking the effort to withdraw your critisism ... I really respect that.

Cheers
David

 

[twist]

Dres, this sounds really nice. I like your style a lot. Is that noise from the pick hitting the guitar? That was a little distracting, but otherwise very nice for one take!


Twist

 

[dres]

Dres, this sounds really nice. I like your style a lot. Is that noise from the pick hitting the guitar? That was a little distracting, but otherwise very nice for one take!

Thanks twist. Just a single mic for the guitar sound... it is a bit clicky due to the plectrum and placement of mic. I read in a magazine that placing the mic above the guitar in the same plane as the 6 strings accentuates the click of the first contact with each string... since the strings vibrate parallel to the top of the guitar (make sense ??). They said it was a good mic placement for "strummers" so I thought I'd give it a bash.

Glad you like the style ... I'm currently trying to get some people together from church to re-record this properly.... stay tuned.

 

[bdbdbuck]

Re: Re: Re: One Take Wonder

Well you certainly live up to your title ! No worries, thanks for your comments. Perhaps you could do a cover and show me how it should be done ?

WOW, the patience of Job! You handled your response much more eloquently than I did mine. I'd love to do a collab Dres, I'll PM ya.

bd

 

[dres]

Hey bdbdbuck, sounds good. I've actually got bass and a female harmony sorted out but anything else you could contribute (mixing, vocals, piano etc etc) would be appreciated.

Looking forward to your pm.

 

[bdbdbuck]

Hey Dres,
Check your PM.


bd