SLuiCe
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Damn. That was very nice. Mix has been covered. That was very very nice.
David
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Very moving piece erichenryus. Love the vocals man, you have a great voice. I wouldn't change anything about it, but if you do i'll sure listen again. Great stuff.*****
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Analytical Man
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Very good, i agree with everything that was previously posted. i also thought that in the opening and the following passage the vox seemed rushed because of the long scale you hit with your voice. it sounded kinda like you were outta breathe. this is a very minor nitpick but just something i noticed. VERY GOOD!
fprod south
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You've got a great voice. I've been listening to "What I Want" a lot, and I'm glad to have this to listen to too.
For lack of a better word there's something "deep" about this. Something more to it than it first appears. I rarely listen to lyrics, but these grabbed me.
I personally would rather hear this without the synth - but that's just me. I'm with powderfinger that other things like background vocals would help with the buildup. The song is just so real sounding. Might sound nice to hear some little percussion sounds like rain stick or wind chimes added to this. Hey, but if you're getting real strings on this, I've got to hear the new version.
Great stuff.
For lack of a better word there's something "deep" about this. Something more to it than it first appears. I rarely listen to lyrics, but these grabbed me.
I personally would rather hear this without the synth - but that's just me. I'm with powderfinger that other things like background vocals would help with the buildup. The song is just so real sounding. Might sound nice to hear some little percussion sounds like rain stick or wind chimes added to this. Hey, but if you're getting real strings on this, I've got to hear the new version.
Great stuff.
erichenryus
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fprod thanks. cool that you're still listening to that other song. i'll get around to redoing that someday. i'm looking forward to deleting the synth track on this.
analytical yes, gasping for air a lot actually. still learning. i enjoyed your singing a lot on that collab. you've got such strength in your voice! it sounds great.
freshears i'll post again if the strings work out and work on my sorry guitar playing.
sluice thanks. still trying to keep up with your tunes. you guys are so damn prolific it makes me jealous.
watyf i'm gonna give the strings a try anyway. i didn't really like the synth thing but had more of a vision of an orchestra anyway. thanks for posting that spectrograph thingy in someone elses thread! i immediately downloaded the trial version and noticed the activity i got going on between 100-300 here. i squashed those frequencies and viola, no more issues in the car stereo.
boydrj thanks. pads are a cheap substitut for the real thing. i won't be happy until i hear what real strings can do for this.
B Sabbath i'm always hestitant to post cause my guitar playing skills just are no where near some of you guys like yourself and sluice and etc......i've only been playing a short while so it takes me so damn long to get even the worste guitar part recorded. back to work.
joro looking forward to hearing real strings myself. we'll see how it works out. i'm pretty sure i won't have a clue how to mix a bunch of real string tracks.
pedullist i heard the same quality in the singing at the end too. it's difficult for me to start out strong i guess. really wish someone would initiate that singing clinic that they were talking about. i have many questions and should probably see a vocal teacher at some point, cause i am interested in getting better at it.
erland thanks for listening. i've had "lady b" stuck in my head all weekend btw. can't get that tune out of my head. i started singing it during a vocal check at a gig last night LOL.
studioviols wow. what a post. not sure how to respond really cause you went into so much detail that i just never expected. i'll definitely take you up on the strings offer. lemme do some work on the ending first. need something other than running into a 3 minute brick wall! thanks so much for all of the nice encouragement. made my day
i'll pm you later.
powderfinger at some point i'll buy one of those rnc's.
participant gotta admit when i first heard dobro's stuff it got me very excited about the possibilities of recording very dry clean stuff at home. i always associated home recording with overreverberated tracks, and his recordings made me realize that you could possibly make great improvements by improving the room you are recording in rather than buying a bunch of high dollar gear.
analytical yes, gasping for air a lot actually. still learning. i enjoyed your singing a lot on that collab. you've got such strength in your voice! it sounds great.
freshears i'll post again if the strings work out and work on my sorry guitar playing.
sluice thanks. still trying to keep up with your tunes. you guys are so damn prolific it makes me jealous.
watyf i'm gonna give the strings a try anyway. i didn't really like the synth thing but had more of a vision of an orchestra anyway. thanks for posting that spectrograph thingy in someone elses thread! i immediately downloaded the trial version and noticed the activity i got going on between 100-300 here. i squashed those frequencies and viola, no more issues in the car stereo.
boydrj thanks. pads are a cheap substitut for the real thing. i won't be happy until i hear what real strings can do for this.
B Sabbath i'm always hestitant to post cause my guitar playing skills just are no where near some of you guys like yourself and sluice and etc......i've only been playing a short while so it takes me so damn long to get even the worste guitar part recorded. back to work.
joro looking forward to hearing real strings myself. we'll see how it works out. i'm pretty sure i won't have a clue how to mix a bunch of real string tracks.
pedullist i heard the same quality in the singing at the end too. it's difficult for me to start out strong i guess. really wish someone would initiate that singing clinic that they were talking about. i have many questions and should probably see a vocal teacher at some point, cause i am interested in getting better at it.
erland thanks for listening. i've had "lady b" stuck in my head all weekend btw. can't get that tune out of my head. i started singing it during a vocal check at a gig last night LOL.
studioviols wow. what a post. not sure how to respond really cause you went into so much detail that i just never expected. i'll definitely take you up on the strings offer. lemme do some work on the ending first. need something other than running into a 3 minute brick wall! thanks so much for all of the nice encouragement. made my day
i'll pm you later.powderfinger at some point i'll buy one of those rnc's.
participant gotta admit when i first heard dobro's stuff it got me very excited about the possibilities of recording very dry clean stuff at home. i always associated home recording with overreverberated tracks, and his recordings made me realize that you could possibly make great improvements by improving the room you are recording in rather than buying a bunch of high dollar gear.
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Myx62
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Most comments have been covered. As far as a song goes this is a good song with deep lyrics. The song fits the lyrics. Just practice your gtr skills and tighten things up. You have a great voice. I can play gtr, but my vocs suck..... We cant have it all but we strive and want it all anyway. Its all about hard work. I have a deep respect now for vocalist that I never had.
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SLuiCe
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I mean very VERY nice.
muzeman
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Sweet tune!
Your voice is just wonderful.
The guitar is perfect,simple and warm.
Nice,very nice,
Pete
Your voice is just wonderful.
The guitar is perfect,simple and warm.
Nice,very nice,
Pete
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sloop
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Wow, good job
Nice piece, good vocal control! I would like to hear the guitar go down a little. At times it is competing with the vocals. You should contact Studioviols(??? can't remember the screen name)--the guy that plays violin so beautifully. Let him lay down a solo violin track below the guitar/vocals. Add a little reverb(very little) to the vocals!!! Whewwww man that would be cool.
Nice job, excellent tones on the guitar and vocal.
Nice piece, good vocal control! I would like to hear the guitar go down a little. At times it is competing with the vocals. You should contact Studioviols(??? can't remember the screen name)--the guy that plays violin so beautifully. Let him lay down a solo violin track below the guitar/vocals. Add a little reverb(very little) to the vocals!!! Whewwww man that would be cool.
Nice job, excellent tones on the guitar and vocal.
Jagular
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What a great song from sheer listening perspective. I haven't really studied the lyrics but from just the perspective of listening & enjoyment it was great. The melody was marvelous and it was very well sung.
Only complaint. I want to hear that nice sweet voice singing those lyrics a little better.
Very nice job. This will be a keeper. I'll replace it when the real strings get added.
Excellent!!!
Only complaint. I want to hear that nice sweet voice singing those lyrics a little better.
Very nice job. This will be a keeper. I'll replace it when the real strings get added.
Excellent!!!
dobro
Well-known member
Missed this one earlier. Glad I caught it.
It's beautiful.
Clear sound, great delivery. Some wonderful lines: 'We cry when we know that we are mostly not alone.'
Paul Simon would enjoy doing this one.
I really, really enjoyed listening to this one. It's beautiful, Eric.
Thanks.
It's beautiful.
Clear sound, great delivery. Some wonderful lines: 'We cry when we know that we are mostly not alone.'
Paul Simon would enjoy doing this one.
I really, really enjoyed listening to this one. It's beautiful, Eric.
Thanks.
skids
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Jagular said:
I completely agree. This is such a beautiful song with such wonderful and intimate lyrics. We need to hear every word.
I so look forward to the re-mix with real strings. This is a keeper for sure.
Nice work Eric.
erichenryus
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thanks for all of the comments guys. i learn something every time i post, and hopefully advance the quality i have to offer. i'll post another version as soon as studioviols adds real strings......mmmmm.......yummmy.........i can't wait.
skids i'll bring up the vox on the next mix when i get the strings. thanks for the comments.
dobro thanks dobro, it's no 'diving into wells tapping turtles on their shells' but i do like that line too. note to self: remember to buy dobro's cd.
jagular studioviols is doing some strings and when he's done, i'll post another mix and address the vocal level. thanks for listening.
sloop honestly there actually is reverb on the vocals right now. i'm so reverb shy that it still sounds uncomfortably over reverbed to me. LOL. i like the name sloop. that would be a good name for a band.
muzeman thanks. not sure if you heard version one or two but things were actually too warm (or muddy) in the first version so i cut the eq in the 100-200 range and i think it cleared up a lot.
sluice thanks THANKS. i love that last tune you posted. that guitar tone is fucking awsome.
Myx62 thanks for stopping by. my hands and brain were not made for guitar, but a dear friend of mine who was the only guitar player i ever really worked with has disappeared and so rather than forging a new friendship with another guitar player......i bought a nice guitar......should have just found another friend.......took the easy way out i guess.
skids i'll bring up the vox on the next mix when i get the strings. thanks for the comments.
dobro thanks dobro, it's no 'diving into wells tapping turtles on their shells' but i do like that line too. note to self: remember to buy dobro's cd.
jagular studioviols is doing some strings and when he's done, i'll post another mix and address the vocal level. thanks for listening.
sloop honestly there actually is reverb on the vocals right now. i'm so reverb shy that it still sounds uncomfortably over reverbed to me. LOL. i like the name sloop.
that would be a good name for a band.muzeman thanks. not sure if you heard version one or two but things were actually too warm (or muddy) in the first version so i cut the eq in the 100-200 range and i think it cleared up a lot.
sluice thanks THANKS. i love that last tune you posted. that guitar tone is fucking awsome.
Myx62 thanks for stopping by. my hands and brain were not made for guitar, but a dear friend of mine who was the only guitar player i ever really worked with has disappeared and so rather than forging a new friendship with another guitar player......i bought a nice guitar......should have just found another friend.......took the easy way out i guess.
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twist
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dobro said:
Dude! Paul Simon could not do this justice. I'll take your voice anyday! That was gorgeous.
Twist
smellyfuzz
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erichenryus,
Your voice is lovely.
I like the song very much, very moving.
The build up at the end surprised me. I like that too,
though I would like to hear more crescendo.
The guitar sound is awesome, I wish I could get mine to sound like that.
There is some changes I would "personally" like to hear;
First and for most, harmonies. Get them in there.
Keys could use more sound stage and depth.
I'm not crazy about the sound either, with respect, a little cheesy.
I would add a bass guitar and some light percussions at the end.
I think this would add greatly to the dramatics of this lovely song.
Finally, I'm not sure, but I think I hear timing issues though out the song.
This is one of those songs that I would love to arrange.
It has unlimited potential. Keep up the good work.
Sean
Your voice is lovely.
I like the song very much, very moving.
The build up at the end surprised me. I like that too,
though I would like to hear more crescendo.
The guitar sound is awesome, I wish I could get mine to sound like that.
There is some changes I would "personally" like to hear;
First and for most, harmonies. Get them in there.
Keys could use more sound stage and depth.
I'm not crazy about the sound either, with respect, a little cheesy.
I would add a bass guitar and some light percussions at the end.
I think this would add greatly to the dramatics of this lovely song.
Finally, I'm not sure, but I think I hear timing issues though out the song.
This is one of those songs that I would love to arrange.
It has unlimited potential. Keep up the good work.
Sean
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lynx
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I concur with the others on the lyrics and vocal delivery - very nice! However, I'm with B.SABBATH, there seems to be a timing issue that is a bit distracting, I really noticed it in the first minute of the tune. Other than that, thumbs up.
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smtcharlie
emotion over sonics
I have been a passive observer on this forum for quite a while. I suppose I'm just looking for recording idea's or inspiration.
You seem to have given me both. Although there are some great songs posted here (usually daily), this is just my kind of song. Thanks for posting it.
charlie
PS - and sure, this is not a highly polished recording...but I think that adds to its charm.
You seem to have given me both. Although there are some great songs posted here (usually daily), this is just my kind of song. Thanks for posting it.
charlie
PS - and sure, this is not a highly polished recording...but I think that adds to its charm.
erichenryus
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smtcharlie welcome to the board charlie. glad you like this song. i like it too. i posted this before i was really comfortable with it (breaking mixmkr's advice of trying to fix everything you know is wrong before posting). i actually tried to finish the entire thing in one session. i'm finding the the best way for me to write is to complete the idea before going to bed......but it leaves me very tired the next day 
. polishing takes time, i don't have time, so i settle for smudgy!
lynx i knew the timing mistakes wouldn't get by anyone....so why didn't i fix them? just lazy i guess. mostly just trying to finish writing a song without getting bogged down with too much guitar playing frustration. working on the retracking presently. thanks for listening and pointing it out. you know the saying about more than three people calling you a horses ass?
smellyfuzz thanks for the production ideas. i'm gonna try some harmonies with a friend of mine who is a brilliant singer. keys are exiting when i get the string tracks. i think the current faux string arrangement (it's not an arrangement, it was just a mess of tones) is fighting to build the song but not cutting it. i can't really see adding percussion. it just seems wrong for some reason. you're welcome to rearrange the song however you like if you really want to.
twist still listening to your daughter's recording. if she ever wants to sing this song..........
. polishing takes time, i don't have time, so i settle for smudgy!lynx i knew the timing mistakes wouldn't get by anyone....so why didn't i fix them? just lazy i guess. mostly just trying to finish writing a song without getting bogged down with too much guitar playing frustration. working on the retracking presently. thanks for listening and pointing it out. you know the saying about more than three people calling you a horses ass?
smellyfuzz thanks for the production ideas. i'm gonna try some harmonies with a friend of mine who is a brilliant singer. keys are exiting when i get the string tracks. i think the current faux string arrangement (it's not an arrangement, it was just a mess of tones) is fighting to build the song but not cutting it. i can't really see adding percussion. it just seems wrong for some reason. you're welcome to rearrange the song however you like if you really want to.
twist still listening to your daughter's recording. if she ever wants to sing this song..........
espskully
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I love the sound of the guitar. Beautifully recorded/played.
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lynx
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Maybe it's because I'm Canadian or possibly hungover but "more than three people calling you a horses ass" means exactly what now?